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06-10-05, 10:05 PM
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Overdose
IP: EA53 D1FB
this is a small pointless piece i wrote for a cypher on rapbattles...
My body is numb, i'm shakin and my shirt is wet.. I'm startin to regret sniffin up all that perkiset.. I'm soiled with earth and sweat.. blood drippin from my feet and my palms.. I look to God, searchin for the peace and a calm.. People are yellin at me, throwin debris and stones.. My face is red from embarassament, please leave me alone.. if only these people knew I was on the cross for them.. so women can be greedy and men can be men.. but it's really alright, for father, these beings know not.. that between the perkisett and my resurrection,i havn't sacraficed a whole lot..
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Seek & Destroy We have fun in my basement Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate. "watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew
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06-13-05, 05:37 AM
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IP: EA53 D1FB
uppin....read this you stupid mother fuckers
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Seek & Destroy We have fun in my basement Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate. "watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew
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06-13-05, 07:22 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 439B E775
It was short but powerful, enjoyed reading it, had nice twist there in the ending. Emotion was pure, strongly worded, imagery was good and I was feeling the flow. For such a short drop, I liked it...you should expand it into an entire piece because I like the concept you're working with here.
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06-16-05, 07:46 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 28AD 5545
very very powerfull, nice shit.....good structure no complaining about ur vocab....multis were kinda weak but nothing to worry about.......overall deff. 8/10 keep writing and posting ur shit is worth reading..........keep it up RTF on mike jackson diss
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