LADIES TALK ABOUT THUGS

Ladies tired of thugs, seem to be wired at clubs all using
Same rap which is lame crap try find love its not amusing
I’m a brother laid back others parade with crack cruising
In drop tops letting the Hip Hop rock on their CD losing
Friends in the bruising winds of hear say I fear today
LADY TIA, SPEAKS:: if want a man with a clever romance
with a better chance of succeeding love me and never glance
at another girl and make my butter twirl in bed like cheddar in France
to make static plain it causes sporadic pain so I want a man
that stays home and not stray and roam to clubs with no plan
FUCIALADY, SPEAKS: thugs are rejected but ladies feel love
And protected that slop’s false want a man not to soft just to hug
And don’t worry about the beat down by a street clown in the club
A thug should git a legit baby but never hit a lady that foul
LADY GFROMTHE D, SPEAKS: I date thugs and make love awhile
They’re so wild but they treat me right sex heat all night
Cock cumming hot and rumbling panties ripped off tight
Kisses his lips never misses mine thug dating is out of sight
FUCIALADY SPAEKS: thug is frame of mind lame but fine
See one its game time a real thug will mug and rob not that kind
These are brothers with a little hood in them feature pants ROCAWEAR
Drop cock like it hot even snoop doggy style sling cum on the block everywhere
So LADY GFROMTHE D you’re not dating real thugs just some hood brothers
Some good mothers for sex butters even complex sheets

Upping For Responses

ok this one is a lot better than ur others.....

...on this u actually stuck with one topic..u still had the multis which was cool but the main thing was that u stuck with the topic throughout......

Sabotage Look At The Responses Doe People Don't Want Me To Stay On One Topic Doe Each Time They're No Turn Out Like This On (anyway Thanks For Responding Doe)

ya man.. this was good cuz there was some sort of a topic so its easy to read nd all the multies nd rhymes fall into each other nicely.. improving, 7/10

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i could write like this all the time but man its boring to folks doe

if u name ur open mic something then stick to that topic.....

i liked it, the multi-style was pretty complex... i g2g though, i'll leave more feedback later

this was pretty good you could of upped ya vocab a lil but it wasnt really needed fo sumin like dis but i would of made it betta but you had a good stucture you had some streched lines near the end but its ok the verse was still good 8/10

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k, i'm back. now, i liked the multi style, it was more complex than most people used, the strusture and flow were also on point, the concept was "ehh" but not bad, and you had some innovative phrase. However, the vocab could use improvement, especially when it's a subject like this, it was a little boring to read, and wordplay/metaphors were lacking or weak. Other than that, I would say that it's okay, keep spitting. I would give it a 7/10 overall.

Yea it was Skr8

Could of Been Better

Keep Droppin
Write Er Day
Read Read Read Read
and Learn some Poetry
and Ya Lyrical Attributes will b Flawless

Capeech?

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