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Old 06-26-05, 03:37 AM   #1
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As The World Turns Pt. 1-Ft Lyriclesolja

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Life surpassed only by the world,
It turns lifes clockwise then counters,
As it burns~sinning people take turnes,
No knowing who was first,
Time passes into air for those with thirst,
Wrong doings swallow those with little minds,
They dont know what there doing,
The perfect life is a maze not easoly fallowed,
Hard to break through fore those lifes are hallow,
The world rotates on even axes,
It becomes harder to get satisfaction,
Bombs expload people witness things,
Moms go "Home" and find there wings,
Babys witness Bright light,
Grown men join the dark side,
And they will burn As The World Turns...



Wall Street
The Clock Tics As Ppl Sleep Through A Homicide
Time Measures Itself With No Extent And Don Arrives
And The World Stops On It's Axis, Erasing It Again
As People Awake From Still Nights And New Days Begin
Causing A Pause In The Pass Which Will Die Eventually
Pass Survived Mentally Holding On To Alive Memories
Continuous Murders Un Hear Of We're Slave To Sins
Death Is Honestly Promised, Threat's A Face Of Friend
Kid's Shoot Up Schools Cuz They "Read It In Books"
Conflicts Revolve * Can't Resolve Imbedded In Hooks
You Hold The Key To Survival But For Some Locks Change
SO You Forced To Be Homeless Just Trying TO Crop Change
My Eye's Wide Open To Society But I'm Waiting Dead Alone
Mind Open But Not To Wisdom So You Left With A Spread Dome
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Old 06-26-05, 03:44 AM   #2
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Old 06-26-05, 03:47 AM   #3
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both verses dope.
Life surpassed only by the world,
It turns lifes clockwise then counters
^ feelin ya first bar fo some reason Lyricle.

You Hold The Key To Survival But For Some Locks Change
SO You Forced To Be Homeless Just Trying TO Crop Change
^feelin dis bar wallstreet.
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Old 06-26-05, 03:48 AM   #4
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Dope THanks My Nigga Weerdness, Lol
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Old 06-26-05, 05:47 AM   #5
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Old 06-26-05, 08:58 PM   #6
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Old 06-26-05, 09:10 PM   #7
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Fix auto wrench hardest but I’m like French artists because
I’ve painted pictures with tainted scriptures so kid pause
Trash tower while holding a mass of flowers my task
Overpowers wackiness, hold up shops wearing ski mask
Coat cats microphones with glue my psycho dome is true
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Old 06-26-05, 09:26 PM   #8
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^^^I WIll Have You Banned Your Not Dope So Stop Trying To Critic Us Dude
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Old 06-26-05, 10:27 PM   #9
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Fix auto wrench hardest but I’m like French artists because
I’ve painted pictures with tainted scriptures so kid pause
Trash tower while holding a mass of flowers my task
Overpowers wackiness, hold up shops wearing ski mask
Coat cats microphones with glue my psycho dome is true
Got a path at home I roam through my car got chrome too

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LMAO thats just funnie..... .....dont make us OWN you
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Old 06-26-05, 10:30 PM   #10
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this was alright in my opinion, i wasnt feeling either of your approached to the subject..

solja, this seemed like a more poetic drop. imagery was there but it was more abstract and harder to grasp. your flow was off in parts as it was more poetic but thats ok. emotion was solid along with your vocab. your first bar really stood out to me, but the rest kinda fell off

wall, i was feeling yours more. it was hitting the subject from a topical approach with nice structure. imagery was there i could imagine it happening in my mind. emotion was good, made me keep reading... solid drop

i thought more metas and a twist here or there could have improved this piece, but overall it was a pretty good drop.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196942
out of the ord for me, mostly hit topicals...just wanted to test myself..pz
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Old 06-26-05, 11:47 PM   #11
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Old 06-27-05, 02:57 AM   #12
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Want a million in bling like a Sicilian king wealth is a disease
Chiefly but relieves briefly the pain and then your life in a freeze
Rhymes airtight like parasites good wood in the hood but termites
Chew and germ ignite the flu best cough soft wear your perm right
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Old 06-27-05, 04:31 PM   #14
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Old 06-29-05, 12:01 AM   #15
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Bumping THis SHit......
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