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06-26-05, 03:37 AM | #1 | ||
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As The World Turns Pt. 1-Ft Lyriclesolja
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Green-Wall Street Black-Lyriclesolja LyricleSolja Life surpassed only by the world, It turns lifes clockwise then counters, As it burns~sinning people take turnes, No knowing who was first, Time passes into air for those with thirst, Wrong doings swallow those with little minds, They dont know what there doing, The perfect life is a maze not easoly fallowed, Hard to break through fore those lifes are hallow, The world rotates on even axes, It becomes harder to get satisfaction, Bombs expload people witness things, Moms go "Home" and find there wings, Babys witness Bright light, Grown men join the dark side, And they will burn As The World Turns... Wall Street The Clock Tics As Ppl Sleep Through A Homicide Time Measures Itself With No Extent And Don Arrives And The World Stops On It's Axis, Erasing It Again As People Awake From Still Nights And New Days Begin Causing A Pause In The Pass Which Will Die Eventually Pass Survived Mentally Holding On To Alive Memories Continuous Murders Un Hear Of We're Slave To Sins Death Is Honestly Promised, Threat's A Face Of Friend Kid's Shoot Up Schools Cuz They "Read It In Books" Conflicts Revolve * Can't Resolve Imbedded In Hooks You Hold The Key To Survival But For Some Locks Change SO You Forced To Be Homeless Just Trying TO Crop Change My Eye's Wide Open To Society But I'm Waiting Dead Alone Mind Open But Not To Wisdom So You Left With A Spread Dome
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06-26-05, 03:44 AM | #2 | ||
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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...eferrerid=41087
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...eferrerid=41087
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06-26-05, 03:47 AM | #3 | |||||
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both verses dope.
Life surpassed only by the world, It turns lifes clockwise then counters ^ feelin ya first bar fo some reason Lyricle. You Hold The Key To Survival But For Some Locks Change SO You Forced To Be Homeless Just Trying TO Crop Change ^feelin dis bar wallstreet.
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06-26-05, 03:48 AM | #4 | ||
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Dope THanks My Nigga Weerdness, Lol
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06-26-05, 08:58 PM | #6 | ||
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Bump Feed Dude............
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06-26-05, 09:10 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
Fix auto wrench hardest but I’m like French artists because
I’ve painted pictures with tainted scriptures so kid pause Trash tower while holding a mass of flowers my task Overpowers wackiness, hold up shops wearing ski mask Coat cats microphones with glue my psycho dome is true Got a path at home I roam through my car got chrome too |
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06-26-05, 09:26 PM | #8 | ||
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^^^I WIll Have You Banned Your Not Dope So Stop Trying To Critic Us Dude
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06-26-05, 10:27 PM | #9 | |||||
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06-26-05, 10:30 PM | #10 | |||||
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this was alright in my opinion, i wasnt feeling either of your approached to the subject..
solja, this seemed like a more poetic drop. imagery was there but it was more abstract and harder to grasp. your flow was off in parts as it was more poetic but thats ok. emotion was solid along with your vocab. your first bar really stood out to me, but the rest kinda fell off wall, i was feeling yours more. it was hitting the subject from a topical approach with nice structure. imagery was there i could imagine it happening in my mind. emotion was good, made me keep reading... solid drop i thought more metas and a twist here or there could have improved this piece, but overall it was a pretty good drop. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196942 out of the ord for me, mostly hit topicals...just wanted to test myself..pz
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06-27-05, 02:59 AM | #13 | ||||||
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Want a million in bling like a Sicilian king wealth is a disease
Chiefly but relieves briefly the pain and then your life in a freeze Rhymes airtight like parasites good wood in the hood but termites Chew and germ ignite the flu best cough soft wear your perm right |
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06-27-05, 04:31 PM | #14 | ||
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Bump Bump Bump.....
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06-29-05, 12:01 AM | #15 | ||
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Bumping THis SHit......
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