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07-06-05, 06:34 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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Baby Girl (Best Love Song Yet!)
IP: B400 11FE
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/dabatos_music.htm
links: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=197923 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=198428 Yeah quality is eh.. cuz i recorded at home with karokie mic at home.. but i think its good enough.. here are lyrics so u could prob. understand it better.. Lol i wrote this song within 12 hours.. wrote it at 12 am this morning.july 6..all the way to 2 or 3 am.. woke up at 12.. wrote it from 12-1 pm.. and recorded it from 1 pm to 2:30 pm lol.. Baby Girl (verse 1) Imma tell you somethin that happen in my life.. About this girl, the one that I loved with all my might.. Tell me why when I wake up in the middle of the night.. You're gone from my side, your gone from my life.. Met in junior high, been together for 3 years.. Been by my side, Thought you'd always be here.. Now your gone, where did you go.. You're my other half, lost a part of my soul.. Now I aint whole, You Were a part of me.. It was clear, guess u could hardly see. Baby girl, you were my wife to be.. My everything, you were the life to me.. Do anything for you, stand in the rain.. It just hurts so much, I cant stand all this pain.. And thinkin bout our past, hurt even more.. Please come back in my life so i'll stop bein sore.. (Chorus) (Verse 2) Its been along time that we've been together.. Thought what we had would last forever.. Guess I was wrong,That'll happen never.. All Cuz you think that it wont get better... Baby girl, gotta think with a better mind.. Try to think, with a mind of mine.. You know, you and me, we're one of a kind... Used to be dark, your the reason it shines.. I remember when we kissed for first time.. Felt the sparks even saw the glow in ur eyes.. Was a Kodak Moment, time of our lives.. A time to remember, damn u were fine. N after that, when walked back to my house, And than you showed me wut luv was about.. N i know that you do remember that day.. Cuz u showed me a pic of that moment, at my birthday.. (Chorus) (Verse 3) Baby girl, its way too hard to explain.. How your name can never leave my brain.. Can stop thinkin of you this is insane.. Dont think the way i feel will ever change.. Like I sed cant stop thinkin about you.. You sed Get over you , I dont know how too.. Miss the times when I was always around you.. Miss the times, when my arms would sorround you.. I know we had many fights, and there were problems.. But for every problems in the world theres a way to solve em.. The day you broke it off..i went down on my knees.. Tears slidin down, I was beggin you please.. I love you girl, why are you doin this to me.. Iono what i'd do, if you would ever leave.. And now that you left, my hearts been scarred.. Now I wait for the day you come back in my arms..
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07-06-05, 07:16 PM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 997D A94C
shit man you elevated a lot, flow is better quality is gettin` a bit better, emotion is very good nice lyrics the thing that i'd liek to see mroe is a better rhyme scheme when you do rhyme your stucture is good and everything imagery is very good, i can feel the stessin you been goin though wit this gurl, but keep workin man try to do somin more then just love songs though alright, try n use your lyrics for salvation. alright 1
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07-06-05, 08:45 PM
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Ya mom massages my nuts
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yea son ya flow is def better in this son....I like the sample on the beat....ya delivery isn't bad....it isn't as smoothe as it could be but its still good....the lyrics are simple but good..u telling a good story but a rhyme scheme switch woulda been nice here an there....quality is a lil muffled but not bad neither...that sample is crazy loud at the end....but beat is nice...overall its a good song that could use some polishing but can also hold it down as is....good shit.....7/10...stay up.........1
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07-07-05, 12:18 AM
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IP: 8D90 9AAC
the first thing i thought when i read this was it would be Great in Audio..but ma comps fucked up (No Speakers)..fuck..
. to me it had great emotion witch is what alot of mcees on this site lack . but the imagery wasnt that good but keep in mind i havent listend to Audio in a long time so im used to reading it... . since this is an Audio peace i was very surprised by the structure great work there.. . as an overall peace i like it alot a good drop all around.....8.5/10 |
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07-07-05, 12:20 AM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: B400 11FE
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haha werd thanx fam.. lol.. it all came out from the heart man.. i didnt even care bout the emotion or imagery lol..
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07-07-05, 03:42 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 1FC1 1C3A
Nice beat, diggin the sample on it and just the overall vibe the beat gives you. Story was nice, clearly written from the heart, vocab might be bit basic but it expressed what's within ya heart so how can I be negative bout that
 Flow has improved indeed, had emotional delivery, quality could be better but I heard worse (like my quality hehe). Solid track!
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07-07-05, 05:04 AM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: 52F5 EB75
ur eitha just a deep person, or girls keep leaving you cuz, cos literally all your songs on ur sclick are bout girls leaving you lol.....this was aight tho, up vocal volume
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07-07-05, 05:47 AM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: B400 11FE
yeah i know.. imma go record at studio friday.. lol but nah i wasn't depressed jst motivated at the moment haha.. but thanx fam..
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07-07-05, 07:26 AM
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OYD
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IP: 1ADC A69C
singing sounded like a cross between Bone Thugs and some generic country singer...this beat is too elevator music-ish
ur flow is good though and your delivery is melodic = good not bad..not great = ehh 1 |
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07-07-05, 03:33 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: B400 11FE
u always leave feed in like a different way from others lol but thanx for atleast listening
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07-07-05, 03:55 PM
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OYD
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IP: 1ADC A69C
^^Ha...different I guess
but yo RTF man http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=198593 get da ball rollin 1 |
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07-07-05, 07:09 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: B400 11FE
Uppin...........uppin............uppin............
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07-07-05, 10:47 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: B400 11FE
uppin for more feed
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07-08-05, 01:39 AM
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GG Haterz
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IP: 1DBF B18A
You would think me being quoted would be enough feed for your greedy chinese ass. Aight, well it's a lot better then what I listened to the other day. Your quality is blah, but man these lyrics were straight fire the whole way. Verse 3 is the best in my opinion. Only prob was that singing chipmunk, kind of threw off the mood.
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07-08-05, 10:37 AM
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Addicted
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IP: 4ED6 D0C7
beat i wasnt feeling.....but your flow i really liked it was pretty smooth...sample was pretty cool but ehhh....lmao @ q for elevator music....your emotion coulda did better bet yea this was decent
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