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07-20-05, 01:12 PM | #1 | ||||
pain is weakness leaving the body
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Who?
IP: 4673 04CC
who was there to take care of me when life treated me shitty
who was the first to see the bull but still would love and forgive me you was the one to only hold out a helpin' hand when i grabbed it called me a prick, dick, and faggot, slammed my head into cabinets kick me out the house and tell 5-0 that i ran away beatin' the shit out me when you're mad (like everyday) cuz of the bruises couldn't work, now u mad at me that i put in work went thru my shirts and found a bag of weed who was there when my mother died who was the one to console when me and my brothers cried u was supposed to be there but no one had my back my only friends in life i met thru cookin' crack now your "little" boy is out makin' runs totin' heavy guns because the hate u give lil' infants fucks everyone who was it that gave me their time when i thought i was thru why should u care, all u need to know is it wasn't u. - a note to my father, Chip
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07-20-05, 01:13 PM | #2 | ||||
pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP: 4673 04CC
please share your thoughts
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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..." -Konchance my poetry: untitled |
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07-30-05, 02:35 PM | #3 | ||||
pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP: 4673 04CC
i would love some feedback. uppin'
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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..." -Konchance my poetry: untitled |
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08-18-05, 04:47 PM | #7 | |||||
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this was extremely dope..good build up, very good ending. I knew a twist was coming, i wasn't sure what it what it would be though. The emotion in this piece was definately felt, and I can relate with this a lot...I love it..i look forward to seeing more of your work...much respect.
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Seek & Destroy We have fun in my basement Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate. "watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew
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08-19-05, 03:16 PM | #8 | ||||
pain is weakness leaving the body
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good lookin on the love. check out some more of my poetry:
my poems: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202821 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202397 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=200947 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=201395
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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..." -Konchance my poetry: untitled |
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