Catch rigorous friction because of my religious conviction
Baptized now rap wise my dew rag is cap size face restrictions
My task extreme can’t blaspheme all my books are non-fiction
Can’t get shook off fiction cartoons can get your art doomed
On my sofa relax and max with my armrest so harmless listen to tunes
Try to devastate with data and investigate matters like the police
Do and flow peace true with a scarred mind and hard rhymes then go feast
Got a fat ranch that look like a combat branch got sweaty cattle
Still ready to do battle brief against beef even get spaghetti rattled
With meatballs and defeat all MC’S, really reveal scum silly in the field
Artillery with verses bombard games with hard flames keep shields
Up like Program Spy Sweeper my flow slam guys sleeker than porn
Flicks I’m born sick with skills and quick to kill being a leader scorned
Winner with rhyme intertwined in thought and caught up in divine script
My mind trip when I write, be mixed up with a fixed cup of wine to sip
Try being braved corrupt and fiery but gave up entirely on
Random notes and abandon hopes on becoming a rapper strong
Rumbling through chapters wrong try find my page
And a divine stage in my life I’m lost mind in rage

my link (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202060)

i loved the word play and i loved the idea behind this, but i felt you were trying too hard to make it soundy witty and intelligent

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tHa KiNG.D.HuG thanks for the props for real

This confused me. I didn't really feel any imagery or emotion, nor did I know what it was about...

It seemed like you were using this piece as an elevation tool trying to work on your interals and multies, which were good throughout. Vocab and structure could have been much better. Try working on developing a storyline and using more descriptive words to improve your imagery. word.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202243

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vague don't know what you want butr anyway thats me thanks for responding to this right here yo

........................nuff said.