Flow Hood

My path of static is like mathematics full of numbers
And like carpenters pull lumbers not even plumbers
Can patch my leaks and close the hatch on freaks
Misled On the block jolted galore
Dead bolt locks on my door
So in brief I hate a thief but they hardcore
Plan to fracture spines then manufacture wines in order
To get drunk a lots wet junk is hot inside my glass slaughter
Bottles of Jim Bean but they leave me slim and mean must alter
My life, falter with strife catch a knife solid like the rock of Gibraltar
The computer service wisdom to my nervous system hooked
Up to my keyboard see swords swung at my head stay shooked
Like HIGHLANDER make no sense try steal my flow strength
And chop off my head many soft on the block misled and dense
Script is so nice and equipped with a device called a microphone
Knock down walls of a home when I rap I’m a psycho on tight chrome
Like Mike Jones looking for a dime cute face and brown round
Behind, walk by grooving bling shine like brass tubing so renowned
Get local awards for my vocal chords oil and lube never eat
Spoil food have a loyal attitude only walk on clever streets

this a ok drop. you got some good rhymes in it. try expand your concepts.

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upping for reasoponses

You aim at parks with low art even Mozart would say
You are a fart that needs to depart the Hip Hop scene today
A lame toad with no main road your clout on route for
A head on collision this bitch has misled visions that are bazaar
Have pride but no voice astride a horse no saddle can’t flow battle
So don’t straddle a microphone your dome too stupid and rattled
I harm plain MC’S leave their brains swarm with bees stung
And hung in the hospital for medication and that’s devastation sprung
So don’t be among these ballistic statistics so duck your head

fuck maddrapper.

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^^^^ HEY BARR YOU CAN HATE BUT DO YOU HAVE SKILLS CHECK THIS OUT

Sinister with flaws but administer laws so yall should obey
Or the hood will sway to crime this is Hollywood at bay
BARR hate is a sad fire you only admire stupidity so hey
You could slew a city if you don’t adjust your act and thrust
Raw facts in replies you see lies don’t win so people like you disgust
Me, I manage affairs and damage the hairs on your head
Like bad afro sheen you grow mean but don’t flow clean instead
You go lean on the matrix of hatred nothing sacred about that homey
Feel me

lol its cool homie you got a good flow, but like he said try n expand ya concepts coz it will make it a deeper piece. keep it up n thx for the feed on mine