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09-19-05, 08:44 PM
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THis Rhymin Game
IP: ABE2 FED7
ok let me try this agian.............
Alot of you on here like to rip me a new one but incase you dont know i just begun and im sorry if i suck at this current time but as a little boy i just wanted to rhyme and im sick of all this rippen and no man i aint trippen incase you though i aint that good and i hope aint being misunderstood theres only few more things i'd like to say and no bitch ill never go away and i hold on to my dignity everyday even after this rhyme i drop today and this is the part where the chorus fades away........... (Give me some pointer and i aint startin beef with no one)
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09-19-05, 08:47 PM
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IP: 28AD 5545
Learn some new words. All of your rhymes are basic. Your whole rhyme scheme is basic also. It is really boring right now. Stick with one topic and expand on it. One way you can learn is from practicing. Just keep writing and you'll get better. There are also tutorials on RV that can help you with this.
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09-19-05, 08:48 PM
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IP: A1D8 879C
Stop beggining every line with and...
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09-19-05, 08:54 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 28AD 5545
lol, i hope you dont think i was beefin wit you...my bad......alright check this.....
try and make all your lines be like this: blah blah blah
Etc. see what i mean...it will enhance your flow. also...try and expand you vocabulary doing this will make you look smarter lol and enhance you verse....multis is a key in a verse but some times its not a big key.....main thing would be to get your point across...and even though this time you did it in a basic form you still did it....keep elevatin and workin at it...ull get it eventually....1blah blah blah
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09-19-05, 08:55 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Drop two links or this will be closed
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09-19-05, 08:56 PM
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IP: ABE2 FED7
thanks man and were cool ^^^^^
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09-19-05, 08:58 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 28AD 5545
^ye but drop 2 links lol.....................
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09-19-05, 09:06 PM
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all righ the told you he was a beginner so in that case this piece right here is dynamite you will onle get better but take a little time look at the dictionary do more study it you will see the difference not many weaknesses for a beginner keep on it now
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09-19-05, 09:09 PM
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IP: A1D8 879C
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09-19-05, 09:11 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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^werd, it was a bit basic....................no hate
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09-19-05, 09:25 PM
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IP: ABE2 FED7
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09-19-05, 09:30 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 28AD 5545
^one more big boy lol
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09-19-05, 09:31 PM
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IP: ABE2 FED7
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09-19-05, 09:34 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 28AD 5545
i get to teach you the site and up my posts...werd
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09-19-05, 09:38 PM
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IP: ABE2 FED7
Thanks man .... Good luck on your battle vs Barr
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