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Old 09-29-05, 11:00 AM   #1
technique
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ILL with Skill

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Somedays I don't understand why my lifes falling to bits
People jumping on my dick saying I can't even spit
Before you judge me your going to be first on the list
While I pit this Prick punch fuckin fists into this bitch
my skills ill and bizarre got you hoes feeling scared
and you don't wanna test me ur lifes ain't gonna be spaired
agressive with an ill nature 2 come and rape you
because your a fake I automatically hate you
Like a demon on a mic killing you soft emcee's in spite
What the hell gives me the right to say what I like
im'a little foul mouth kid i'll rip out your ribs
and force feed em down you like pigs
As I come out on top spitting this shit non stop
This is what i do the new white boy in hip hop
If you all don't like it you can get your self popped
cuz you ain't ill enough your getting your heart stopped
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Old 09-29-05, 08:20 PM   #2
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Old 10-02-05, 08:46 PM   #3
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Vocabulary: Basic
Flow: Okay
Structure: Okay
Concept: Not much to say. Unoriginal.
Topic: ...no thanks.
Favorite Lines: Nothing quotable.
Rating: 6/10
Advice: Uncreative. Find a good topic, just talking about yourself is boring as fuck, especially when you lack wordplay and creativity.

RTF on Dead Beat Holiday(which is really entitled Pharaoh's Sarcophagus, I just made a mistake.)
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Old 10-02-05, 10:24 PM   #4
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u got creativity
got flow and structure although sum lines lost sum flow.... I'll try ta keep helpin ya

but still u need ta elevate in sum aspects

try using a more exended vocabulary...
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