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werd, i got Payn on that shit, tell us wut yall think, werd

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2472945

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2472986

werd

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first time peepin you

oh god u didnt use this played ass beat, eeeewwwww anyways that aside, hook is off the original??? ye it is.... flow doesnt fit the beat, extremely robotic, emotion is lackin, delivery is real boring... lyrics are basic as hellll, i hate this kinda talk in tracks its oh so played out... second??? eewww quality is million times worse than urs, flow is terrible... delivery is wack emotion n presence doesnt exist... lyrics suck... sorry if i sound harsh but im just being honest with you.

this was pretty trash, sorry fams, keep practicing

lol, how r my lyrics basic az hellll? j/w u know, werd

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well alot of time u rhymed one syllable, n ur rhyme scheme was extremely predictable, n vocab was farely weak aswell

woah holmes, i didnt ryme 1 sylible once in my whole verse.

a yes yes yall, heres my introDUCTION NOW
kool col-b's in tha muthaFUCKIN HOUSE
u a bitch if u a person who this MITE disTURB
ima roll up on u bitchez in ya WHITE suBURB
n u gon b like "o my, this records QUITE saPURB"
so then i make u muthphukkaz BITE tha CURB
cuz if u wanna talk 2 me like that u gotta STOP TALKIN
then i'll b standin there, in ya blood, POP LOCKIN
n unda my arm i gotta FINE SENIORITA
n on my waste i gotta 9MM
so let it b known, im PREPARED 2 BUST
so wen ya c me wit my homies BEWARE OF US
n we b down wit b n' e's, n that aint BACON n EGGS
its wen we run up in yo crip n then we BREAKIN ya LEGS
take wut we want, then kill u. u'll need self deFENSE 2 LIVE
if u offended, fuck u, dont b so muthaphukkin SENSATIVE

nom sizlaxin? werd

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mmmm not bad but hate the flow lol nice beat errbody knows this song , nice man ,nice presence and all, first time hearing you , overall good track

u a bitch if u a person who this MITE disTURB
ima roll up on u bitchez in ya WHITE suBURB

the different sounds in su and dis breaks up the multie.... makes it more internal rhyming than multy

cuz if u wanna talk 2 me like that u gotta STOP TALKIN
then i'll b standin there, in ya blood, POP LOCKIN

thats forced cos talkin and lockin are pronounced differently meanin u needed to force ur pronunciation on one of them to change

but even with the multies, they themselves are basic multies, and your rhyme scheme is simple, and predictable.

well, thas just cuz u have a british accent, so u say thangz different then we do ova here. but yeah, thanx fo tha feedback anywayz. u too speats, werd

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That track didnt match ur voice...You need sumthan like Lil brother beat...Or sumthan from an ole Tribe album...But anyways...your flow doesnt work well with that beat...Really I think you have tah have a bounce type flow ta catch that sound..

okay so anyway. i hate this song to begin with

Col-B your flow was real basic. very predictable as leady said. lyrics were basic as well. try to come up with other ways to say all that gun talk. quality wasnt bad. pretty good actually. mic prescence wasnt too good. just keep working and you'll get it


Payn - one word to sum up your verse is umm.........wow. wow at the lack of emotion. wow at how off your flow was. wow at you talking over the beat. wow at your lyrics not being very good either. i mean if this was your first audio, then that's somewhat understandable. but seriously you have to get into it. you didnt match this song at all. learn to ride the beat.



this was not a very good song. i think both need to up their emotion cause it sounds real boring like i dont even wanna listen to it. just practice on that and payn practice on riding the beat.




please return the favor and leave feed for my new song in the sig

werd. Payn re-recorded hiz verse, check that shit, werd

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