venom...

intertwined with the psychosis of our interregnum...

it moves through my nerves like the fire of your breath on my brain...

playing under my skin...

tamed the bitterness, pregnant with your thoughts...

the contemplation: "ought I birth your dreams?"...

a placebo of nightmares, so omnipresent...

creamed hate in ultrasounds, seven absences...but craving you...

the concavity--in my womb through abuse...

rather should i abort you...or accuse the kettel, black...

break loose...

or "should I walk in your shoes?"...no self control...

waiting for you, the pretense to the marriage...

yet you cremate my soul...spread unjustly over seas...

while you create seas i see through your other needs...

i see you as less than feces...

pulped reminiscence to an embryo...

bringing forth the miscarriage of the realization...

that patience brings pain...laced in venom.

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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2495733

Reminds me of my own writing style somehow...

Nice poem, you keep enough mystery to it to make the people think yet it is understandable though. You inserted good poetic wordings, making it interesting to read. The concept is one many can relate to I think yet you managed to make it your own as well. I love how you sometimes used only half words or half sentences yet expressed so much with them.

Keep at it sweetie, you are growing as a writer...

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yeah everything that DQ sed. I really like ur writing style, its very original and u know how to use structure and wording to create an actual effect. I really like reading ur stuff and i will be looking out 4 more. keep droppin! (RTF plz on 'dead weight')

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This is my sig. what?

I'm white so u KNOW i can't rap =)

I will definitely RTF if u leave a link, thanks!