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Old 11-08-05, 07:15 PM   #1
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We Pay 2 Betray

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Ubiquity within a flick
Of a ubiquitous heart
That never ceases to exist
A love withdrawn forced to reminisce
Traveling through a timeless script
From rose to hip
And skies to ruins
In oceans of imagination
Continuous depths with no limitation
Moving Inwardly extruding
A realm of divulging dedication
To the totality of time
Mirroring the wrist of Jah’s benevolence
Echoing destined shouts of beauty
So strange that sacredly immense
Startled but not yet completed
Glory alone to shy to feed it
Touring the epitome of ubiquity
Without enough dreams to spare
Any life that would have been cheated
Some scary existence plucked of sadness
Unveiling the faces of joy
Souring all the madness
Over the cities that are changing
Rearranging the evening stare
Giving way for the acclaiming
Tandem treachery we pay to betray
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Old 11-16-05, 03:45 PM   #2
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Dunno why this hasn't gotten any feed yet actually...

Feeling the concept and the way you worked it out was so interesting and captivating. The images you were using suited the piece and the overall vibe of the poem. You had a good balance in your vocab.

Keep it up!
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