I wrote this 'cos i had enough of cock suckers dissin' me and my town.

I SEE MORE PEOPLE TALK SHIT THAN THOSE CHART HITS,
LIKE THEY, STRAIGHT OUTTA LONDON CLAIM THEY THUGGISH,

WHY YOU THINK YOU LEFT IF YOU SO HARD IT'S,
THE CAPITAL CITY,
SO YOU GUTLESS,

NOW THEY COME DOWN,
TO MY HOME TOWN,
CLAIMING THAT YOU HARD,
PUTTIN' DOWN MY TOWN,

IF YOU HATE IT SO MUCH THEN GET OUT MY TOWN,
THERE'S THE DOOR MOTHERFUCKER I AIN'T CLOWNIN' NOW,

YO, I HAD IT UP TO HERE WIT YOU DISSIN' MINE,
ALL Y'ALL THE REASON I AIN'T HAD MY TIME,

YOUR'E THE TYPE TO CLAIM HIP-HOP BUT YOU'RE ALL TALK FOOL,
WE CAN FIST AND FIST SO PUT DOWN YOUR TOOL,

YOU KNOW THE RULES,
THE ONE WHO GET DOWN GETS SMACKED DOWN,
OH? YOU GOT ON FUBU,
SO WHAT? YOU RAP NOW?

YOU'S A FAKE MOTHERFUCKER FROM AROUND THE BLOCK,
NOW YOU'S A COCK,
STOPPING MY FLOW LIKE BLOOD CLOT,

I'LL BE SPEEDING THROUGH WHETHER YOU LIKE IT OR NOT,
MOST OF Y'ALL STRAIGHT FAKING WHILE YOU CLAIMING HIP-HOP

WHERE'S THE PROOF THAT YOU KNOW HOW TO PARTY AND FLOW?
PLAYA HATER,
YOU'LL BE TRIPPING WHEN YOU COME TO MY SHOW

ALL Y'ALL'S THE REASON WHY THIS TOWN IS DEAD,
LIKE YOU ALL PUT BULLETS IN THE SIDE OF IT'S HEAD,

HEARD WHAT I SAID?
NOW IF YOU GONNA RUN OUT YOUR MOUTH I'LL BUY YOUR ASS A TRAIN TICKET,
GET THE FUCK OUT MY HOUSE!
WHAT!
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IF YOU'RE GONNA DISRESPECT MY TOWN,
YOU'D BETTER NOT,
COME,
HERE,
NO,
LONGER

SO THINK TWICE BEFORE YOU OPEN YOUR MOUTH,
I'LL BUY YOUR ASS A TRAIN TICKET,
GET THE FUCK OUT MY HOUSE!

YOU DON'T WANNA DISRESPECT MY TOWN,
COS YOU GONNA,
MAKE,
MY,
RAGE,
STRONGER

SO THINK TWICE BEFORE YOU OPEN YOUR MOUTH,
I'LL BUY YOUR ASS A TRAIN TICKET,
GET THE FUCK OUT MY HOUSE!
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WITHOUT OFFENDING ANYONE ON THIS RAP SONG I SINGS,
I DIDN'T ASK ANY Y'ALL TO MOVE DOWN TO HASTINGS

SO AT THE SAME TIME MY TOWN AIN'T SOMETHING TO PEE ON,
THEN GO TO THE BEACH,
RELAX AND GET YOUR WEED ON

I'M GONNA PUT THE SPEED ON,
THE KINDA SHIT O.A.P.'S REPEAT ON,
MY FLOW BE REALLY NICE TO SMOKE YOUR TREES ON

I KNOW THIS SITUATION AIN'T THE BEST FOR MONEY MAKIN',
INSTEAD OF PLAYA HATIN',
GET YOUR TICKET AT THE STATION

START BITCHIN' BOUT THERE'S NOTHIN' TO DO,
WRITE A LETTER TO THE COUNCIL FOOL,
WE WANT A BARBECUE

INSTEAD OF SPENDING DOUGH AT THE PUB,
THERE'S A PARTY ON FRIDAY AT THE LOCAL HIP-HOP CLUB,

AND IT GET'S PACKED UP,
THEN WE MIGHT TAKE THIS SHIT OUTSIDE,
WHILE YOU HATERS GET CRACKED UP,

AS I PLAY THE THUG,
FAKE THUGS THEY GET JACKED UP AND CRACKED UP,
DUSTY SKIDZ ASK YOU TO GET YA BACK UP,

GET YA BACK UP GAINST THE WALL,
NOW GET YA BACK UP,
IF NOT, MIGHT AS WELL BE LAYING ON THE GROUND IN HANDCUFFS,

YOU HEARD THE POLICE,
MOTHERFUCKER GET YOUR HANDS UP,
TALK SHIT, DEPORT YOUR ASS BACK TO BANGKOK
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(CHORUS)

IF YOU'RE GONNA DISRESPECT MY TOWN,
YOU'D BETTER NOT,
COME,
HERE,
NO,
LONGER

SO THINK TWICE BEFORE YOU OPEN YOUR MOUTH,
I'LL BUY YOUR ASS A TRAIN TICKET,
GET THE FUCK OUT MY HOUSE!

YOU DON'T WANNA DISRESPECT MY TOWN,
COS YOU GONNA,
MAKE,
MY,
RAGE,
STRONGER

SO THINK TWICE BEFORE YOU OPEN YOUR MOUTH,
I'LL BUY YOUR ASS A TRAIN TICKET,
GET THE FUCK OUT MY HOUSE!

IF YOU'RE GONNA DISRESPECT MY TOWN,
YOU'D BETTER NOT,
COME,
HERE,
NO,
LONGER

SO THINK TWICE BEFORE YOU OPEN YOUR MOUTH,
I'LL BUY YOUR ASS A TRAIN TICKET,
GET THE FUCK OUT MY HOUSE!

YOU DON'T WANNA DISRESPECT MY TOWN,
COS YOU GONNA,
MAKE,
MY,
RAGE,
STRONGER

SO THINK TWICE BEFORE YOU OPEN YOUR MOUTH,
I'LL BUY YOUR ASS A TRAIN TICKET,
GET THE FUCK OUT MY HOUSE!

No wrongdoing if you home screwing if so I’m guilty
Of fault for a filthy assault on a juicy coo-chee in silky
Panties on Thanksgiving it’s like a tank pivoting my way
Couldn’t duck and her pudding was pluck I couldn’t say
Anything but oh baby got some good slow gravy it taste like
Turkey the girl attractive and intellective coo-chee the type
Active and effective oh my tongue will lick a chick quick with hype

nice again there dusty.

Couple of pointers as i think you are ready for them.

Next peice you write try to experiment with a wider vocab. Think of words and phrases you aint used in rapping yet and try them.

Also try some multi rhyming. same sounds in one line
eg: bitch can lick my dick quick til it spits

^^thts basic but you get the idea.

I see alot of potential wiv you but you need to elevate the intelligence of the verses a bit more. As good as that would sound wen you spit it you need to remember people are reading it and perhaps use something that you know is really funny or something.

Have a think about that bro

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Cheers mate. Yeah, I suppose i need to realise that i'm writin' it and not spittin' it.
I'll bear it in mind and go away and write a more complex one, I'll have to go and ring my dealer for inspiration!

ha ha, thts the spirit son, we got to get our inspiration from somewhere

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