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Old 11-30-05, 01:47 PM   #1
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Have You Ever!!

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HAVE YOU EVER?

have you ever fallin in love so deep its hard to tell whats truth and lies?
When you look into there eyes all your worries disapear.......I have!
It feels good untill something you do ends it all
in one minut you can loose everything you have, and all you'll have left is the memories and your broken heart...
You'll find ways to alter the pain like alcohol it makes you forget but it always comes back, drugs well..... that increases your emotional sence.
i'v learned what it feels like to have sompthing so important to you make you feel like shit, the guilty one, and make you feel like you've failed at something you've givin ' so much for.
I gave it my all but sometimes that isnt good enough.
you'll need to think , you'll need to see if you still bleed.
have you ever had somone say I love you and make you fell all worm and at ease?
sometimes people are ment to be and some arnt
one day you'll find somone who is the one
but untill then all steps inbetween are just steps to finding your true love.......


http://community.rapverse.com/showt...09&page=1&pp=15
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=210426

Last edited by Gangsta Kim : 12-14-05 at 10:01 AM. Reason: change ending
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Old 11-30-05, 01:49 PM   #2
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Yo I didn't get to finsh the poem class was ending ..................but its all good

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Old 12-09-05, 11:14 AM   #3
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uppin for feed back................................
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Old 12-09-05, 12:38 PM   #4
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holy shit! def good poem, i mean kinda original but u did ya own thing w/ dis.....could use a lil more vocab in dis but overall pretty dope....
"I gave it my all but sometimes that isnt good enough."
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i can def relate to dat line n also da rest of ur poem....nice emotion.....keep up da good work ma.....1
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Old 12-09-05, 12:39 PM   #5
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oh n a lil 411 for u...u need 2 linkz or dis thread will get closed
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Old 12-14-05, 10:02 AM   #6
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thanx man . im new to this so......... hey i changed the ending let me know what u think kk?...........
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Old 12-16-05, 08:11 AM   #7
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still dope....da endin wouldnt of mattered....so nuttin changed from my prospective...still a dope piece for a newbie
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Old 12-19-05, 08:46 PM   #8
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thanx . i new ur opion wouldnt change but i like the new ending better eh?. thanx
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Old 12-19-05, 08:47 PM   #9
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uppin for feed back.................................
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