http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pag...m?bandID=449079

My first song ever, collaberation with The Revelation..

Word!

Left feed on Fux and Q's tracks.

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Here's another link as well..

http://community.rapverse.com/showp...57&postcount=21

beats ok, not feelin the clap n how the drums are made.... first verse: flow is extremely robotic/stoppy, starty... delivery needs improving lyrics are cool, hook is cool, 2nd verse i same really.. 3rd verse: flow is better, still needs improvement, delivery is more or less same, lyrics are cool that effect is fucked up tho, wow that was short... and another verse flow is better n it fell off badly as pronunciation went off aswell flow is much better on this verse.... yeh not really feelin it but there is potential in both heads on it.. keep it up.

hmmm the first guy...
the beat is good but you need to up your emotion. you need to act more confident and feel the sorrow in the topic. the lyrics were good, your flow was meh and it seems effected by your emotion. quality needs work a lot. and you need a few effects on the hook.

2nd guy:
quality is horrible as well, lyrics were good. emotion lacks as well, really work on being more smooth with the beat and even as I said for soul you should as well try to feel more confident to the topic.

overall decent track.....up quality and emotion for both.

LOL I feel so robotic right now...

rtf on my trickle shit with LE

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Ok

Red Bull....Your Flows Off A Lot,But Its Good For Your First Track..Qualitys Awful Though...Emotions Kinda "Robotic" Seems Like you Just Reading The Words,Memorise Them!

Px...Flows Getting Better Needs A lot Of Work Though,Qualitys Awful Again,Same About Your EMotion As R.B's,Feeling The Lyrics On Both Peeps

Keep Elevating!

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OYD MAFIA

i need another link to ur feed i trust you two but i dont trust everyone and since ive modded ive found about 10 ppl lying so one more link

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