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05-09-06, 08:32 PM | #1 | ||||
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me against the world. (vol. II)
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its me against the world in a fight for glory.
u know the earths history, so let me tell u my story. back in 89 i was a boy, a child of the underground. i was a quite kid, never made a peep, never made a sound. till now. im letting out. went and broken out of my cage. full of rage. like i was invited here and got booed off stage. i didnt ask to be born. so why did they force me here. i was scared before. but now i walk earth with no fear. no tears, no sentimental feelings for me nor the rest. fuck the best. there just blah blah. and nothing less. this is not a test. its a public service announcement. a way to show you people that im sick and need councling. so help me out. before the world takes me over. im tired of walkin with no fear, but still lookin over my shoulder. i thought i was a soldier but i guess im a coward in disguise. a masked man walkin the earth full of lies, lies, and more lies. but they dont realize the world is against me, and i cant hide. a gun at my side. fully loaded and thinking twice bout suicicide. having no fear, is walking the earth bound to a chain. in my dreams there are toughts where i feel the pain. its like some one turned on the light in the back of my brain. left me permently isane, with the rush of poisen in my vains. in reality is where i walk alone. feeling nothing for no one. expecialy the world where i just doing circles for fun. the world is my enemy, and we got out with rivalry the only way i win this game is when sleep in my dreams. besides that im fucked up in this life and left in swirls cause it remains always just me against the world.
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05-09-06, 08:38 PM | #2 | ||||
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227453
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227338
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05-10-06, 03:53 PM | #3 | ||||
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uppin..........
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05-10-06, 04:05 PM | #4 | ||||
what dat be...
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ok lets see
the flow was pretty good , structure was aight , rymes were tight, everything was good ur getting better at this stuff keep on elavating...good luck |
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05-11-06, 01:59 AM | #5 | ||||
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This was a pretty sub par drop you had pretty decent feeling and emotions going into this drop your structure was also pretty good aswell..your topic is pretty played but your drop was pretty decent.. only thing you need to work on is your imagery put some more vivid words in your drop and make the reader imagine wats going on..keep it up.
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