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05-27-06, 01:04 AM | #1 | ||||||
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Between US
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Between Us As I looked deep into her frantic eye’s of love Emotions rage and adjure that she was sent from above. With a lifeless measure of admirable respect for self She had beauty, passion, and essence with a lone touch to tell With a feeling non describable brought forth to earth. One to open up secrets that’s what you call a woman’s worth Staying up late nights Dialing my number down To help you with bad times, to turn you frown inside out This secret love affair that drifts between two souls within the air is careless Driving away from the promises we made and capturing with such finesse’ No one will understand the vow that is made between this woman and this man I hold on to his hand in hopes that he grips onto mine with a passionate plan I held him close and felt a love that could stop the world from spinning Close my eyes and picture his face that always carried a new beginning I can’t share these thoughts with another soul so I look to you for a sense of reality It derives between us; the meaning of a new lust, and we can’t escape from mortality . . . When I would look at you, I get the butter of flies With a touch of shy presence, when I would look into your eye’s I love it when you hold me; you love it when I say Those three little words, that replays, that just can’t go away. When trailed tears would fall, I’m always there for you. To better and interminably comfort you, when feeling sad and blue I'll never let you go hold you close to my heart and self. As for now my words speak louder than actions when i say i love to death. Using our new found sensuality we disappear and fall from the essence of grace As I am only with you in your dreams when you wake up you will feel my embrace I was misplaced and gets hard to be here without you, but tonight it’s only you and me As we lay our heads and close our eyes, loneliness is brought to a lesser degree People will question the guidance that has lead me to a short but sweet conclusion And with all the miles that separate us, this love is worth the depressing illusion With everything I know and everyone I meet, with every touch I feel I think of you When its all said and done, the scary part is that it’s painful to wake up and bid you adieu White=Boy Red=Girl
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05-27-06, 01:16 AM | #2 | ||||||
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=228812
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=228402 ^^ Links ive left feed on
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05-27-06, 01:34 AM | #3 | |||||
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damn this was hot.. i got love for poetry and this was crazy..
there was some damn nice quotes every line too.. Keep with Expression man.. tis doin good.. `1
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05-27-06, 08:28 AM | #4 | |||||||
Reppin' Da East Coast
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Yeah, Was Tight...... Keep It Up...... |
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05-27-06, 01:24 PM | #5 | ||||
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yup yup. pretty tight. nice flow but u could have changed some of the words differently and put some more multies in there. some internal rhyming would help alil too. but none the less this was pretty tight. over all i liked the 2ndverse. that chick is cool.
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05-28-06, 02:39 AM | #6 | ||||||
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^^
Thanks peeps for the feed!
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05-28-06, 03:21 AM | #7 | ||||||
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ayo upping this shit man!..
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05-28-06, 03:36 AM | #8 | ||||
Can u guess 2v's Gender?
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shits dope man.
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05-29-06, 06:48 PM | #9 | ||||||
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^^
Word fam man thanks holla!
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