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first drop on here, hope you'll like it so i can grace u wit more of my stuff, lemme kno wutchu think, and if u couls grade it on a scale of 1-10, 10 bein the highest i'd appreciate it alot



i know somewhere there is my valentine
i know that someday i will have to find (My Valentine)
but right now i dont really have the time
until then will you be my valentine (My Valentine)

she got a body like a coke bottle, booty sweet like candy
with her six pack abs and her bag made of fendi
is she brown or bronze skinned before she go tannin
the type that can turn me from insane and scarin
i like a latin chick with an ac-a-cent
but she has to have at least half my sense
no money, girl i got that all covered
but you gotta have a brain just to be my lover
i dont like all them ditsy chicks
you gotta fit the description, i'm picky chicks
im choosy, you'll lose me, if you just a floosie
i need a hot girl that can heat a jacuzzi
i'll keep your hands full, diamonds, stone jewels
and keep the bed rockin like the flinstones do
Ya Ba Da Ba Doo, ive had alotta girls boo
but if i hadda choose, girl id rather have you

i know somewhere there is my valentine
i know that someday i will have to find (My Valentine)
but right now i dont really have the time
until then will you be my valentine (My Valentine)

she gotta be a dyme and she gotta be fine
the kind that dont whine, and she gotta be mine
sit back on the weekend, relax in the evening
i dont need you doin no cookin or cleanin
i got people that got people to do that
please meet jeeves, he'll show you where the pool's at
cars not automatic, i'll show you how to use that
closet so big you wont know where your shoes at
jewels, blues green and yellow
have you in so much ice, make the freezersjealous
jesus fellas, i dont mean to be stealin
all the girls in the world, but i got me a feelin
one day i'ma find that one
that i'm gonna settle down with and have my son
but for now i just have to rhyme
to a girl i never met, my valentine

i know somewhere there is my valentine
i know that someday i will have to find (My Valentine)
but right now i dont really have the time
until then will you be my valentine (My Valentine)

i can take you to eternity wit a one way ticket
and i perfer you neva heard of me, and all my riches
so it dont occur to me that you're just doin it
to get into my pockets, then flip flop ruin it
i'ma tell you what i like in a chick
the right type that could make you my wife in a split
not too skinny but not too broad
not to sissy but not too hard
not too fragile but not too flimsey
not too bashful but not too friendly
type of girl that look as good when she wake up
as she do when she finished with her make up
natural beauty, with a smokin hot figure
dont smoke a cigarette, nothin would turn me off quicker
and i realize that right this second
you're out there right now as i write this record

i know somewhere there is my valentine
i know that someday i will have to find (My Valentine)
but right now i dont really have the time
until then will you be my valentine (My Valentine)

descent..topic was kool..
hook was alright
flow was nice, same with structure
rhymes were good...
overall diss was good/descent

thanx man......uppin for more comments and/or suggestions

This Joint Is Straight, I'm Not A Fan Of The Love Shit But It Still Grabbed My Attention Witt Some Decent Punchlines & Actually Havin A Full Piece Witt A Hook & Everything Rather Than Just A Half Assed Verse Like 90% Of Om Posts... Its Clear You Just Sat Down And Wrote Three 16's Real Fast Though With Simple Wordplay And Soundin The Same As Every Other Love Song Out. But It Was An Aight Concept & I Could Actually Picture This Shit On The Radio. 7/10

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