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06-22-06, 01:24 PM | #1 | |||
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"Hears to the Mute"
IP: 0825 899A
When your tongue dives
To thread my swollen vocal cords... That high note never seems to end, It just swings by the stain glass window, Forever sweet in that bleeding noose. Take me, and don't you ever stop. Rape me... I want you to. I want to wonder the obtuse Wrapped in handcuffs and screams. Razorblades choked in latex never tasted so serene. Beer the aphrodisiac, lets toast: Hears to the mute... May we forever ignore his tune. Miranda never loved him anyways, She was just curious to sea If she could create just that. Placed the pillow over his hope As the devils fingers gripped Two lives, and we paraded in the ash. Our love is sold by the bottle, This liquor of tears forwhich we drown. But we do, we love ever last choke; The screams that formed Long Island sound. So for one last time, make me yours. Dominate my lack of backbone; As I fold within my own tears ... Remember, I brought you here. |
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07-12-06, 09:36 PM | #2 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 0C70 063B
im not going to lie,
at the beginning i had no idea where u were going with it. but mid-way through i was startin to see whats up..beginning..a bit of a mystery i think you didnt get out wut u were trying to say fully....unless im just stupid..but it seems u did not get ur point across overall i say thats my only complaint after that you really captivated my mind and this wasnt that bad of a piece good job rtf if i decide to write ne thing
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