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"Chillin'"

Verse1: Para
Hook: Para
Verse2: Para

enjoy this one, or disrespect it, y'all are still my fans!

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Listenin'..this is on that beat...u showed me that's koo..intro is kinda different..you sound a lil bored but you talkin' bout fun..fam shit is still monotonous however its got a lil more energy..but for this track you need 10 X more energy fam...try listen on an unbiased level..shit sounds a lil boring like beat is hot you're flowing on it tight you just need MUCH better energy and that will get rid of that robotic delivery and I can see this in the clubs..hook is catchy but you need to make it catchy by bein more energy..lyrics are okay..mainstream lyrics...sumin light hearted id see kanye west bump or sumin..but yeah fam things you did well on:

- Flow
- Hook

You didn't:

- Delivery
- Energy wasn't enough
- Robotic
- Monotonous

^change the energy and guess what fam IT ALL changes...into a more catchy track, right now lyrics and flow is right but emotion del;ivery and the way ure saying the words are totally wrong..change that..jus try sumin new dont be stubborn for new experiences I used to do it but trust me u need to try sum more shit........

Put more energy in yo shit..wild out aight fam..good lucks keep me posted..

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listening again..lol


flow : it was okay just that u fell off at some spots..if u just balanced on the tempo u cant miss it!

beat:this is cool..u know its really chiilin...lol

Hook : simple..nice...u flowed best on the hook
Verses : i'll be honest i didnt give CLOSE ears to the lyrics..but the few that caught my attention were decent..

Quality/delivery : its all gd man atleast u were clear..not mumbling!!

This is Life with triple_n remains the best tho

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lol at this beat, makes me laught, robotic voice, mmm I dunno man, flow is cool but you had prob trying to catch it,mmm energie iss realllyyy boring seriously, no hate, when you record,are you alone at home? cuz if so, dont be scared to scream thats how youll be good, hook iss eee like I say you try to put your words longer to fit in the beat, its like " I fucked your mommmaaaa" lol it was an example, you sound like a robot seriously, try to do something with that, like being more confortable with your lyrics and all, you seem like reading,

not your best bro my bad

rtf on revelations

thanks for the feed, and I feel you on the emotion speats but it's true, I need to rehearse my shit more often. uppin for more, Ill rtf soon.

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I like the beat,flows gettin much better,better one the second verse thought,seems more...like you more in tone with the beat nah mean??Delivery was ok,laid back still seems a lil stiff but you gettin there bro!!feelin the lyrics real nice,Hook was dope,i thought.Emotion needs uppin still seems a bit,meh on that aspect...Presence is getting a lot better man,more confidence,I def.liked 2nd verse better...

Good track,your elevating!
RTF Here Plz:http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=231538

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