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Old 08-03-06, 07:44 AM   #1
David Lama
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Maybe Someday

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Maybe someday, I’ll be able to explain all of this
why I’m stuck inside this dumb place and cant call the kids
who might be in an orphanage, all bored and shit
cause my wife’s a crack phene thats too old to quit
and shes the coldest bitch, the main reason I’m here
so far from my kids, lying in bed.. dreaming I’m near
what do you do when the best part of your day is seeing ya tears?
I made an imaginary friend;
hes a bartender, & I’m needing the beers
I been weeping for years, but I don’t blame my wife
I ignored her and the kids and there’s no way that’s right
I’d be in my room while she was alone afraid at night
not for herself, but for me.. and how I spent days and nights
for 6 years I’d waste my life on something I still love
well, they call it a waste, I call it that which for nothing I’ll give up
the Name’s Corey, I’m a boring and lame text head
my fame’s corny, whack but self proclaimed best vet
that became sorry,
did I mention how I changed the name text yet?
it’s a lame story.. & now I’m ashamed, vexed, stressed
cause my wife thought I lost it & put me in the crazy house
I should have been cautious when I told her “scrypts my baby now”
yea she bought it,
while she shopped for the thought of me being maybe out
there, didn’t know it’d cost this.. just reflecting makes me shout
And lately frown,
God was trying to reach me and I was missing his calls
but its easier to see the little things when the vision is small
if I had opened my eyes I could have restricted this fall
cuz years back, I hosted a tourney where David Lama predicted it all

Yours truly Richard Corey,

p.s. with this story, one last thing I say with love
scrypt hasn’t shined yet, but what if maybe someday it does?
they’re telling me it wont, but I don’t have to take this cause
I‘m being released now, so you know today’s the day it does



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If you don’t know what this verse is referring to.

Richard Corey made a huge article on wikipedia intitled scrypt.. and to sum it up he tried to change the word "text" to "scrypt" and is trying to get text heads published and stuff, basically take this text shit beyond the net. oh yea and this verse is for a topical tourney hes hosting. hence that line where it talks about hosting a tourney
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Old 08-03-06, 07:45 AM   #2
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Old 08-03-06, 09:03 AM   #3
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ight kidd i always like ur shit cus u know the real deal. but u started of kinda slow. didnt get my attention. but once i started readin it and found the flow it was pretty good. but if seen much better from u. and why did u put ur self in the 3rd person. u could have made 2 verses, one of richard corey. and then where it says u predicted it all in some battle u could have did that. would have been a lil kooler. but still good shit.
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Old 08-06-06, 05:30 PM   #4
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man this is cool.
mutlis in the first stanza are nice. Emotion is thick, exttra vocab would help the emotion but i feel you done this topic and concept justice.
try centring your work from now on, will make a better layout. add a title, change font and shit. Just makes a peice look better.

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