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Old 12-06-06, 07:56 PM   #1
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Black Dragon Feat. Woo and Re - On Lock (I'LL RTF)

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238088
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=237966
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some old shit that me and my crew recorded......MIC Order - Hook ALL, 1st Verse - Woo , 2nd Verse - Black Dragon , 3rd Verse - Redikulous......
'preciate any feedback.......

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Old 12-06-06, 08:30 PM   #2
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What's good man. Long time no see....


First dude who was just talking at the beginning has a good voice for it. The hook at the beginning was nice, but the dubs were off pretty badly. First verse had a real nice flow and dude had some nice delivery, but the lyrics were really bland. If he sat and wrote some really raw shit he'd have owned the shit outta this track. Second dude had more of a choppier flow.....he kinda ends each word with a really mini pause which is what causes this. He would really benefit from trying to connect the words like they were one. Third verse was pretty nice. Lyrics were probably the best. Flows retarded line was nice. Only real problem with this verse was the horribly off dubs and probably the worst cow imitation I've ever heard in my life......lol.

But yeah man.....nice track
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Old 12-06-06, 09:11 PM   #3
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lol.........yea man that Redikulous wuz tryin to make the mmmmhhh sound like after u eat a good meal.........lol.......'preciate da feedback Enygma
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Old 12-06-06, 10:33 PM   #4
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The hook is pretty koo, the dubs off yea. The beat is hot def feelin it. First dude is hot, fuckin ill flow. Idk if he livin that kinda life but his lyrics pretty coo. emotion is hot too. 2nd cat is pretty coo, flow is a lil rough but it works. The lyrics are dope, you could tucked a few more syllables in maybe some lines. 3rd cat is coo, I don't like his quality. But how the dubs were done was coo. Lyrics are kinda funny. The adlibs are so annoying lol, flow is prety coo though. decent verse though. nice track yall

rtf here: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238049
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Old 12-07-06, 01:25 PM   #5
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Old 12-07-06, 08:12 PM   #7
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..................preciate da feedback man........
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Old 12-14-06, 11:55 AM   #8
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Old 12-16-06, 08:22 AM   #9
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SIC on loc....


lead in is too long

beat is intense sounding

intro flow is mixed a lil too loud...the hook is alright, but kind of sloppy

1st verse...flow is good/delivery matches

*flow gets boring after awhile tho*

ambitious track that lacked polish

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