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Old 03-18-07, 06:01 PM   #1
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word
I forgot to fade it out at the end but it still sounds pretty darn cool
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 03-18-07, 06:51 PM   #2
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Aight man.....

This beat is tight man.....I'm really feeling it. Your voice just doesn't sound good with shit talking man. When you shit talk, you should influx your voice a bit or just clown instead of trying to sound hard cause it wasn't really working for me.

Aight, the first verse was hard man. Your delivery was tight. You brought it raw and that's what this beat needed. The hook wasn't really sticking with me. I think it was the mixing though cause it sounded like it had a good base to it.

A bit short too....lol. You should redo this with emphasis on the hook and the intro and make it like an MAS anthem. I could def hear Prah on this shit.


Good shit man
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Old 03-18-07, 10:36 PM   #3
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I heard this beat before, Mobb Deep shit dope. I like your hook a lot, very catchy and just straight gangsta. Your adlibs was pretty loud though still coo. Your flow is hot and your delivery is fire. Shit sounds mad ill on my headphones they like turned all the way yp too. Lyrics is pretty coo, the flow is def ill yup. I like this track duke, downloadin it haha
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Old 03-18-07, 11:33 PM   #4
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i dont really try to sound "hard" .
Im a laid back person most of the time, ya dig
very VERY few people have heard me angry and yellin and shit
haha
but word yall
thanks for the feedback
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 03-19-07, 01:02 AM   #5
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halla at me" at the begining, show your funny accent. kinda goofy through out. your adlibs seem off on the hooks and in the verse they decent though. verse is decent no stand out lines, but a decent track, real short for real. and what dude said above. go over hook and drop another verse and i'd be good.
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