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Old 05-04-07, 11:11 PM   #1
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I'll break your music down honestly

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post your link here

I'll analyze your shit 100 percent being 100 percent honest

I have a feeling most of you will get ass hurt too

so if your brave enough post what you have
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Old 05-04-07, 11:28 PM   #3
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Old 05-04-07, 11:36 PM   #4
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what makes you any kind of authority on my music anyways?

I mean your not that good last time i checked
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Old 05-04-07, 11:36 PM   #5
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Old 05-04-07, 11:37 PM   #6
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what makes you any kind of authority on my music anyways?

I mean your not that good last time i checked


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Old 05-04-07, 11:37 PM   #7
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what makes you any kind of authority on my music anyways?


so he needs authority to make a honest comment on someones music?!
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Old 05-04-07, 11:41 PM   #8
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Okay I'm going to critique I LOVE YOU AND YOU HATE ME

Production(since i know you made the beat):This beat is good for the most part. The sound and sampling is good. I really like how you played out the kids voices that was tight. The only thing I really didn't like was the snare. I think you should've made that harder hitting snare and that would've been better. The hi-hat sounds good the way you mixed it.


okay i'm going to skip tito since hes not the one that i'm breaking down


EL REY: your voice is very unique. I think that thats one of your strong points. Your swaggers okay and I think its better than a lot of people on here. I think that the way you spit attracts your listeners. I think that the thing you should mostly work on is making your lyrics flow better. You have potential to be a beast on the mic. Your lyrics are an other strong point I've noticed lately you've really been wanting to hit that metaphorical type of lyric which is a plus.

Overall this is a pretty good track one of the more listenable tracks on this site.
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Old 05-04-07, 11:46 PM   #9
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I'm going to get on a critque for "Oh Lord"

Production:This beat is pretty generic. but it sounds good regardless. Sounds like something eminem would make.


TZAR:Your lyrics and the way you make them flow are good. But you dont have much swagger with your voice which makes it hard to stay with you. I think you should switch up your vocal tones a little bit to make you sound more cocky. THat makes people listen to you. Your lyrics and your flow are fine but yoru swagger and lack of proper delivery is what makes it kind of boring. You def. have something going though.


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Old 05-04-07, 11:48 PM   #11
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Old 05-04-07, 11:49 PM   #12
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LOL AND SIR SMASH"ALOT I KNOW YOUR NOT TALKIN ABOUT ME LIKE THAT

why dont we battle? you sound cocky enough to want to get ate on the mic
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Alright SPUL i'm check out MONEY AINT SHIT


Production:I didn't really like the sampled screwed hook..iono it really wasn't hittin. I thinkt he drums should've been louder.......and it would've been better..overall this brings it down a little bit.


SPUL:Your flow is good and your lyrics are good you have a commercial sound which is good. The thing that brings it down a little bit is that i've noticed you start sounding the same on a lot of tracks I think you should try to change up your vocal tone a little bit......If you changed your vocal tone more you'd be a nice emcee...right now i cant really get into it....like i said before be more cocky..cuz its hard to beleive what you say cuz you aint being that cocky.....be more cokcy with it and it'd be tight....i mean you got enough credentials to do it..so DO IT!!! overall this is straight and I think you couldv'e done way better

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Alright SPUL i'm check out MONEY AINT SHIT


Production:I didn't really like the sampled screwed hook..iono it really wasn't hittin. I thinkt he drums should've been louder.......and it would've been better..overall this brings it down a little bit.


SPUL:Your flow is good and your lyrics are good you have a commercial sound which is good. The thing that brings it down a little bit is that i've noticed you start sounding the same on a lot of tracks I think you should try to change up your vocal tone a little bit......If you changed your vocal tone more you'd be a nice emcee...right now i cant really get into it....like i said before be more cocky..cuz its hard to beleive what you say cuz you aint being that cocky.....be more cokcy with it and it'd be tight....i mean you got enough credentials to do it..so DO IT!!! overall this is straight and I think you couldv'e done way better

word


word up son thanks for input. i def feel you with same tone ish, Apexx told me same stuff, so def i'm working on that in my upcoming tracks. but appreciate input
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