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08-05-07, 09:56 AM | #1 | ||||
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IP: 9204 9119
something i was working on got 20 lines done....tell me what yall think ~1~
life is like a labyrinth....a puzzle piece to put together.... with war like wraith....i can change a nice day into stormy weather.... i try to stay clever while haters try to play better.... with the flames i spray quick to make u feel pain till u lames wither.... kiotic minded morbid individual on the move for survival... dont have to rush i just take my time when ripping my rivals.... the game can be a treacherous blow to the mind..... but threw the hard times i still find a way to flow with rhymes.... im a hawk on flight to sweep down on enemy positions.... cause if the beef is to come...i stand by ready for any situation..... i get impatient so i place my mind in a trance and conserve my energy..... so when i explode is like a fatal blow to the body from a surge of electricity.... i gotta burning fever and im not talking about having flu symtoms.... this dark matter is building in me trying to take control of my system..... filling my mind with obseen thoughts getting a hold of my wisdom..... this nature is unnaturally getting me cold and troublesome..... struggling to fight off the inner demons gripping my spines nerves.... its a daily clash of titans occuring inside for life as long as time turns..... if theres a cure i want the antibiotics injected in me quick.... before i boil over hotter than steam engines on steam ships....... my links- http://community.rapverse.com/showt...689#post3178689 http://community.rapverse.com/newre...ote=1&p=3178139
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08-05-07, 11:46 AM | #2 | |||||
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I was Really Feelin Dis 1 My Nigga...Ya Wordplay was On Point..and The Flow Was Also Hot...Stay uP
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08-06-07, 12:59 PM | #3 | ||||
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thanks for the feedback.....uppin on this!.....
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08-06-07, 01:04 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IDK if u want feed from me but here u go ur Wordplay was good! Ur flow was really tight i would say thats wat i like the best!
I Think it was worded nicely i could already tell jus from readin the first line that this was gunna be good! Return the feed on my post Rode of My Life! pleeze! And no hard feelins no more im tryin to get this beef situation settled my nigga!
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08-06-07, 01:09 PM | #5 | ||||
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thanks for the feed fly....im uppin on this!.....~1~
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08-06-07, 03:46 PM | #6 | ||||||
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NICE WORK FAM....
flow was smooth... punches was good.. wordplay was good.. all around tight drop... i gotta burning fever and im not talking about having flu symtoms.... this dark matter is building in me trying to take control of my system..... filling my mind with obseen thoughts getting a hold of my wisdom..... ^^ was feeling that... and the ending... nice image painted.... feeling expressed clearly and good... 9 outta 10 fam keep it up... 300 J.G POPP'IN OFF... |
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08-07-07, 07:28 PM | #7 | ||||
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thanks Ransum.....got more coming soon.....~1~
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08-11-07, 01:47 PM | #8 | ||||
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im uppin on this i would like some criticism.....~1~
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08-12-07, 08:39 PM | #9 | ||||
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uppin this one to!!!!!!!!!!!........................~1~
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