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Old 03-31-08, 02:41 AM   #1
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I've got a feeling, it's hard to explain
Feels like the devil rents a room in my brain
The things im ashamed of feel like dear old st paul
The things that I wanna do, I don't do at all

So bury me deep, cover me with snow
Wrap me in sleep, blanket of ghosts

The spirit is willing, but the flesh is so weak
I wanna kiss her lips, but I kissed her cheek
Just hear my request, give this one on fair way
Please take me home before it's too late

Bury me deep, cover me with snow
Wrap me in sleep, blanket of ghosts

Wake me when it's spring time in heaven
When the tears are all white from my face
Wake me when it's spring time in heaven
When I'm strong enough to walk in that place
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Old 04-12-08, 01:22 AM   #2
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I feel the devil rents a room in my brain.

^ dope right there.

This is nice bro, stay dropping.
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Old 04-25-08, 09:02 AM   #3
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ye souls right about the line

also feelin' the 2nd verse.

keep it up man.
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Old 07-21-08, 09:53 PM   #4
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This started much better then it ended my friend. Your opening stanza was pretty dope man. But by the second, I started losing interest. The wording became more elementary and your flow become weaker. Emotion started amazing but went down to average, same with your visual opinions. Decent piece with a dope start. You've got potential -- hope to see you venting into it.
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