I'm tiring of you fakers
Firing shots like the Lakers
You all sound the same
In this pathetic rap-game
This website's for losers
Like me, drunken boozers
Can flow better than us
Where's the skill? I run pus
It's all I have to offer
Paranoid like Dennis Hopper
Of hearing your insults
I still post, like we're in cults
We stick like dry glue
Our perception is skewed
I say we're spraying our spout
Nothing to write about
Which is why I'm now quittin'
Go ahead and start bitchin'

this will be closed soon.... this belongs in open mics

Total Wackness..


Man, You Need A Lot Of Work.

To Simple ..

that's like a poem I would write in grade 3 yo... with more adult content tho... you should be quitting...

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let's all stop flowin on a dummkopf state
and start droppin bombs
on the bitches we hate
is this fate
the fact that i came here is great
you can't wait for the next moment/invade
on my space and that shit'll get you killed
attack me/look how fast your blood spilled
i've drilled better emcees through the ground
with less intense words they were drowned
i've found/a certain sound that made me unique
and i'm inbound/with a vocabulary that's
less than weak by week i get better
i'm comin for your cheddar
and if it's not mine by a certain date and time
a crime will be committed
then all will say i spitted the best shit you ever heard
i'm assured/a place on the top of the game
a place where all challengers are put to shame.

^^^ WTF you keep posting "flows" in other peoples theads you fuccin moron

and as for this rhyme...yeah it was amd basic, yo need to elevate, start by incorporating multis into your rhymes, make ecah bar rhyme more than one syllable...thats where to start

dat was good man not as good as ur other shit but good i could see where ur tryna cum from and the basic was meant to happen
icould see dat and who ever said this shit needs adult content doesnt no shit it dont make u a good mc or what ever to rap about fucking in every verese who ever wrote that advice was pathetic
any way tight shit man

well noone will comment on the ones i put up seperate...but as soon as i put one in someone elses post...blah blah blah....

liam... maybe you should learn to read... I said it was like a poem I wrote in grade 3.. WITH MORE adult content... I never said it needed more adult content you fuckin' goof aSS faggit... what my comment meant was this shit is elementary, I drop basic lines with more meaning and depth in my fuckin' sleep. (I rhyme in my dreams)

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your not really flowin like rap wise dogg. your doing like some poetry shit. work on your metas,and vocab. but i like ya humur.
start with that and keep workin.

...YOU ARE WACK AS FUCK!!!!!!!
and anyone who doesnt think so i wack too....
this is one of the most elementary drops i have seen

quite herbish in my view, did you get transfered here from Herbainia?

whatever though do your thing but get some structure and skill added to your whole style of wackness, i guess thats a trait that comes with fools from Herbainia!
"endovidualmind"
(i was at opia's crib)

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