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Old 02-23-03, 12:12 PM   #1
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i'm a witness to violence/ silence struggle & abuse/
i turn minds in an instant/ i turn that trust to acuse/
i will bring down your spirits/
and make your whole family feel it/
and when u get that burst of faith /
i'll turn around & steal it/
u spend your money on me/
when no food is in the house/
and it's only because u like the way/ i turn u inside out/
when others bring u down & clown/
and turn your smile/
into a dangerous frown/
i'll be there
just wait
and you'll surely see/
to get that pick up
JUST COME TO ME/
i'll love u to death/ & a kiss will tell u what's next/
i'll give u deep passion/ in your mind/
but be careful/ because too much will make u blind//
i'm close to those thugs in the game/
for only money/
i'm close to u too/
when we're alone u call me honey//
i don't discriminate against sex color or creed/
but i do cause havoc amongst those who crave for greed/
i embrace the weak/ all day/
and break down the strong/ before long/
if i give u understanding to my method/
in no time u'll start doing wrong/
i'll tell u the real my dear/
and the real is this little fact/
i'm no where close to your friend at all/
because my name is CRACK.....................
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Old 02-23-03, 01:56 PM   #2
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aye i was feelin your poem some people look at it and would be like oh that was tight just cuz it has a rhyme scheme but if u really read and understand it means something. but all in all i liked it so keep writin i look forward to more. 1
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Old 02-24-03, 12:45 PM   #3
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nice to see ya back blackmoon..

...bringing with you your unique like style...always on the edge...always raw...but still quite well executed...

...i liked how you took this though the motions so well...maybe once or twice a biut too much...but still overall very well...and it moved very nicely onto a hard hitting ending...a bit of a twist even...

liked it a lot, blackmoon...


....respect...
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Old 02-27-03, 08:24 AM   #4
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im feelin dis message that you got up in here and i got much respect dat'chu put it out there like that the people closest to me by the blood in my veins is what makes me ashamed because the can relate execpt for the end, the truth it's bringin them down

I've read some of ya stuff before and i like ya mind from what ive seen im uppin ya style along wit'cha talent and i got much respect
ya girl QT holla
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Old 03-01-03, 08:13 AM   #5
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much love for com.
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Old 03-04-03, 01:04 AM   #6
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hard hitting, line for line. each bar flowed well off each other. was feeling how you approachd the problem postiioned as the drug itself. mad raw engery in it. stay up and stay evolvin.

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