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Old 02-27-03, 12:06 AM   #1
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GetCash vs. Darkshells313

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remember 8- 10 bars
standard votin and all that shit
u go first, goooodluuck
 
Old 02-27-03, 12:25 AM   #2
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who is this nigga name get cash
when my steel flash
it will be the perfect definition of quick cash
I'll go first
just to quench my thirst
I hope ths Kid have some idendity
Because when your mother have to visit the morgue
you want be in your physical form
maybe not in the spirit
because my rhymes is spirit
so I just spit it so you can hear it
 
Old 02-27-03, 12:28 AM   #3
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your turn
 
Old 02-27-03, 12:45 AM   #4
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uh huh dont even try to play da cash game wit me
cuz ill go 'freeworld" on ur ass ,3 -1-3
ur mommmy gonna be the one cryin in church
cuz ill liquidate u down and sell u to stem cell research
LEMMME TURN MY SHit up rite now so u can hear it
by the way , great move ryhmin spirit wit spirit
"is it in u?" when u talkin bout quenchin ur thirst
" gonna be a while " when u layin face up in dat hearse
im all about the bills snigga ,tryin to get in ur purse ,
so when getcash spit at u , he gonna get reimbursed
 
Old 02-27-03, 12:57 AM   #5
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=32222 here my link , dont wanna get banned u fuckin MOD bitches
 
Old 02-27-03, 01:06 AM   #6
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who vote
 
Old 02-27-03, 01:09 AM   #7
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Vote=GetCash

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I thought this was a weak battle, but let's break it down.
I actually thought it was a little too short. Undercooked Beef.
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Darkshells:
-when my steel flash
it will be the perfect definition of quick cash
I'll go first
just to quench my thirst-

These are your strongest bars. This is ALL very SIMPLE.
You know... it's not the worst stuff I've seen here.
But where is the vocab? Throw me a damn punch. Hurt 'em!
When you get to here:

-you want be in your physical form
maybe not in the spirit
because my rhymes is spirit
so I just spit it so you can hear it-

That is straight garbage. It doesn't mean a whole lot, you rhyme the same word, the grammar is just difficult to acknowlege as a fluid whole. The last line is not offensive though.
Just keep working, you seem to understand the need to rhyme and have some flow. Work work work.
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-ur mommmy gonna be the one cryin in church
cuz ill liquidate u down and sell u to stem cell research-

-im all about the bills snigga ,tryin to get in ur purse ,
so when getcash spit at u , he gonna get reimbursed-

These are good exchanges. Overall I think the flow was all right, I think care was taken to have fairly even bars. Although it stumbles on bar4, the punch makes it worth it. You opened and closed well. The weakest bars were:

-LEMMME TURN MY SHit up rite now so u can hear it
by the way , great move ryhmin spirit wit spirit-

Should have just left it alone man.
The next line is "underdeveloped" although I like its follow, so I won't gripe too loudly.
Overall a solid verse.

Clearly enough to score a solid victory here.
 
Old 02-27-03, 01:21 AM   #8
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cash dawg, u need some work....serious
 
 


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