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02-27-03, 06:28 PM | #1 | ||||||
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"Drug Abuse"
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Once again, ment for text, not audio, so the flow goes alittle hey-wire in some points.....Enjoy....
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ chemical additives makes your anatomy seem faboulous; specifically master this for a glimpse of habitual actions twist; synthetic materials used for falsely accused superior abilities; pathetic individuals clalmley accept this inferior tranquility; dosages of potency percieved as relief from stress' reaches; a state of telekenisis seems as the others flames become extinguished; memorized verses seem impossible in cronical conditioning; penalized for the simple trys at possible building scheme; the structure of existace seems to basic to be recognized; based on veins strained state in the peek into a directed life; blinding lights cause the night stalkers to enter a type of hibernation; so at this time of patience, I must settled for rhymes amazement; being blind and taited from the hype engagement a so called righteous payment; for a life's arrangement in a rollercoaster ride of Himilayans; ups and downs, but downs become more common than common sense; decreasing the public confidence and hence been a problem since; High class validictorian gets lured into addictive dominance; Finds herself palmin' fifths simutaneously tryin to remain calm, but tense; The mortal scouts the party, tho attending the prom wit' friends; would've been the right decision, something in her night is missing, she found her prince; Cocaine, the chemical in 'shining armor' will salvage this damsel in distress; A gentleman approaches "Hello miss, try a sample, it's the best"; examining the mess, there's nothing to loose...but, she's gambling with death; She becomes interested by the way the guy is handling the meth; powder drops on her dress, the highs of rushing adrenaline has her mesmorized; guy offered a cleanup, she refused....His tempered rised...; she looks frightened as a wicked look entered his eyes, tipsy, and rude; With rigorousness he grips her wrist, escorts her to an empty room; tears her clothes off n' begins to lick her tits, and then; connect his dick to lips while forcefully fingering her clitoris; She beckoned screams as she's getting raped by this aggressive fiend; A tale of an innocent soul falling victim to excessive methamphetamines; ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Again, flow was alittle wierd, but the meaning was more of my focus here...... P.E.A.C.E.[/i] |
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02-27-03, 06:38 PM | #2 | ||||||
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shits phat
nice vocab i need to expand mine how did you |
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02-27-03, 08:16 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 5153 3B92
^weak reply... and read a dictionary... how else?
That was nice, you do have some tight vocab but vocab isn't everything. Too much of it can ruin a verse simply because majority of people aren't familiar with "Webster". You had good content in this too and you're right, the flow did get a lil choppy at times but I'm sure it's something that is worked out vocally. That's the problem with audio and text, what is right for audio isn't always right for text but what is right for text usually is right for audio. It's almost like a 1 way thing. Keep postin pz |
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03-01-03, 02:41 PM | #4 | ||||||
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Thank you for the feedback......
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03-01-03, 02:48 PM | #5 | |||||||
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^^ i agree |
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03-01-03, 05:20 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 8E44 BF12
ill as fuck! son that was nice u had ill imagery an nice vocab nice peice stay up DiiL RoC! F5!
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03-01-03, 06:39 PM | #7 | ||||||
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^^^YO! mah nigga! good looks with the replies peeps...
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03-01-03, 10:56 PM | #8 | ||||||
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yo anotha ill drop from ya.Dis piece iz leavin me speechless,i aint seen a ill drop like dis for months.Ya multis & vocab wuz sick as f*ck,had sum serious imagery & story-tellin.Finally sum new heads who have good posts.Stay ^
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03-01-03, 11:45 PM | #9 | ||||||
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Thanks for the love y'all...I appreciate the possitive shit gettin said about my topics, multis, vocb, and the overall work that I put into a song...thank you very much....
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