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Old 03-13-03, 09:04 AM   #1
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Little Bitch Talkin Sh*t!!!!

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When i ain't around u like to talk shit -b-,
Now it is time to walk and then we will see,
Which one of us will come out on top, who do u think it will be, I know it'll be all me/
I have been pushed by a little bush, when i swing it'll be like whooosh/
I will beat u hard to da ground, Put you in a place where u can't be found/
U will be in 6 feet deep, it'll be da last time we meet/
not to be tested, even when bein arrested/
goin to jail for havin so much hate, bein put behind the gate/
but wait, u still talkin shit, i guess u still wantin to be hit/
U are gonna be lit, like my bowl, gets deep into my soul, makes me feel whole, u just a damned fool/
me v.s. u is going to be the duel, votin on wheather or not you should live in a poll, it'll be so full that the verdict is clear, i ain't sayin this shit sincere, i should be the one that u fear, i will hunt u down like a deer, my fist hittin ur face will be all dat u hear, so if u are smart u better steer clear/
but by talkin shit u gonna be hit!


Just something i wrote and i know it ain't that good since i just started doin this shit, but if anyone has any comments or hints for me i would love to hear 'em. Peace out.

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Old 03-14-03, 09:49 AM   #2
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YO

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Com on i need some help wit my shit. I could really use some advice form anyone who can give me some.
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Old 03-14-03, 04:58 PM   #3
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man...not feelin dis @ all.Ya had sum regular hooked on phonics lyrics.U need more metties,more punches,betta vocab,and overall flow cuz it seemed like u jus put words togetha to rhyme which killz evrythang.Jus work on it..Stay ^
-Avi
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