I'm on top of my game like I was standin' in wait on the top of the globe.//
droppin' raps that's toppin' craps spit by mc's like tha doc an' slim, hittin' home.//
like I'm spittin' addresses out tha phone, book, jus look.//
or listen or some shit that isn't dissin', and gittin' on my last nerve.//
'cause if ya even thinkin' an' ill thought or cop a das-verse, I swear that'll be ya last words.//
make sure ya crash first, play'n a game a chicken ya damn right I'm the first ta swerve.//
then step out the drivers seat and blast heat through yours.//
he shoots, an' I score, scorn any mc for swor'n bars say'n they on a higher levle than christ.//
I perspire venom in my sweat and shake my head like your pet.//
dry myself off, while my swell melts off ya skin.//
hell's hot, where ya think I'm livin' in.//
swimin' in tha molten rock, while I smoke a rock and rock a beat with the heat of an ill drop.//
stop an' reach defeat, depleat mc's like tha rain forest.//
leave them callin' god askin' for re-inforcements.//
like tha wheele of fortune, I'm a game of chance to play an' advance, means ya take ya chance with death.//
spray'n tekk's ta splinter spinal chords and force early retirement.//
that's why so many vets are x-pirin'.//

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c'mon upin' this shit... wake the fuck up...

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yo I was really feelin this line right here

"stop an' reach defeat, depleat mc's like tha rain forest.//
leave them callin' god askin' for re-inforcements.//"

I also like the rest of this shit, but that was my favorite line

cool.. the first part of that's a pretty standard line... the ask god part is my own... uppin'

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uppin'....

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sum of ya lines here were tight as fuck such as :

I'm on top of my game like I was standin' in wait on the top of the globe.//
droppin' raps that's toppin' craps spit by mc's like tha doc an' slim, hittin' home.//

or listen or some shit that isn't dissin', and gittin' on my last nerve.//
'cause if ya even thinkin' an' ill thought or cop a das-verse, I swear that'll be ya last words.//
make sure ya crash first, play'n a game a chicken ya damn right I'm the first ta swerve.//

those lines got sum tight little rhyme schemes in them. but sum of ya other lines either diddnt have the flow to match or just diddnt work as well overall. but still u got sum well nice parts in this. 7.5/10 anyway check mine not on me (war) aight peace lad

I was feelin this piece...work on your bar structure...4 real...your lines are way to long...

Bar Length:
Minimum Syllables~ 13
Maximum Syllables~ 16

^^^That'll help flow to....

Stay spittin...

P.e.a.c.e.