Yo i just kept on writing............


In my future I can see the past repeating.
A War time when people only come out in the evening.
Year 03 time when "F*ck you" is a greeting,
haters you only win by cheating.
In Africa i see those little kids aint eating,
and the smog stops your breathin'.
...I'm sleeping with one eye closed,
still in all my clothes,
just in case somebody knows
or doubts about the path that I chose,
isn't so simple as I post
But no - I'm still strugglin'.
i'm not at home
I got to use some judgement.
...little kids who need to be on punishment,
can't- 'cauze parents will get vice-verse
so kids continue curse
at old women for the fun of it.
Hard for me to stomach it.
ever since my home plummeted,
things changed so fast, where is government!!".
nobody runnin' it.
Someone shot a gun,
too bad his brother got in front of it.
The future just arrived, but it's too bad no one wanted it.
Too late to abort it 'cause our views are distorted.
I brought a camcorder to record it.....


the ENd.....

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Yo Gangsta, this shits aiight, I'm feelin it, good flow and rhymin was alright, just need a bit more consistency in the rhymes, Nah what I'm sayin, but its good, I like it.. ^^^

Peace Out Yo!!!!

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Thnx Yo for the feedback................UPPUN

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nice points. flow was ok. i like it.

7.5/10

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