MeNTiLL:
Pitch Black, Missed facts of reality, Trapped in a deep sleep
My heart beats, Endless streets of hells heat give me the creeps
Unable 2 speak, I can't yell, And it seems help is a mile away
"Put Tha Child Away", Tha voice I hear screamin despite of my fate
In light of tha day, I see a man standin, But I can't make 'em out
Children R dancin but stop when they C Satan in prison 2 try 2 break 'em out...

Evolve:
My eyes are twitching as sleep shakes my nerves about
lids are closed and dreams convey my word of mouth
scream with silent shouts, a nightmare behind those bars
projecting evil with a powerful touch to crush the stars
sight seems scarred, a figure in a stance glancing my way
picture is distorted as kids prance, dance, and play
then they start to stray, Satan steps out of his cage
now the siloette and i are afriad of his carnage & rage...

MeNTiLL:
Flames surroundin' his frame, Seems sorta like a fairy tale
A scary tale, Nightmare, Now Im right here sayin' my Mary Hails
Red flesh, Fire for breath, Now the kids are tearin' down God's poster
What am I supposed to do? That tha mysterious man is gettin' closer
No gun, No holster, Im unsure if he's a friend or foe
But complications elevate, Satan chases me, Is this tha end or no?

Evolve:
standing in a puddle of sweat as it drops from head to toe
inner terror exposed, the heat of death has never been so close
the figure ahead running from the roast, approaching my presence
fire & brimstone in his backround, toasting each print he steps in
is this a showdown like western, or is he running to be saved?
should i go in for the kill or find a different path to be paved
the children laugh as he came, the moment of truth has arrived

MeNTiLL:
Tha hairs on tha back of my legs, Set ablaze, It's like a rage
Happenin' inside tha covers of a myth, Wish I could turn tha page
Ahead of me, A gun raised, Like Im runnin' toward death at a steady pace
Shoes already laced, Tha distant figure and I are now standin' face to face
Hard to embrace tha grace, Dunno if he's here 2 help me or end my struggle
We communicate witout words, And it seems telepathically our mind form a huddle

Evolve:
the pain & anguish doubles as the ground shakes & rumbles
at first the similarities are subtle, then i realize
stare at him with pealed eyes, is it fake truth or real lies?
cause i see myself in this guy, cant handle the shock & surprise
this is no disguise, no illuzion, try to believe but im losing
must have lost my mind, gone to hide in an elusive seclution
just then i came to a conclusion, finally able to see thru the smoke
the heat turned off and lungs worked without a choke
it was hell trying to find myself, slit the devil's throat
evil was gone with the alarm, at peace when i awoke

DO NOT SLEEP ON THIS!!!!!!!

that was ill shit from both of you flow and everything else was dope and u played off each other
keep it up

Much appreciated... Peace

Tyenol P.M.'s

Nice Drop..The nightmare sounded really scary..lol..but anyways..I liked this..It was good..it had some nice vocab..and some nice multis..Overall Nice Drop..go peep my first open mic on here..Its called "Saving Hip-Hop"

Uppin'....Peace

you always come nice mentil, i wont bother with any "tips" cause you got your own style so i wont try to change it.

leave some feedback on mine "one of my verses" you got talent so i want to know what you think about it

yo that shit was nice guys. beautifully done. nothin really to improve on. good vocab, some nice multis and a nice topic. i really liked this. keep spittin guys

YO i can SAY DAMN na'mean to this piece but it was tight nicely done both of ya'll.........

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Yeah, this piece is tight, I never sleep on good work, though cats be sleepin' on mine...Anyways, I give it a 9.5/10. I Deducted Point five for this line:

the children laugh as he came, the moment of truth has arrived

It didn't rhyme with nothin', it wasn't needed...Keep it moving'....

nasty stuff yall.I aint been hea for a while & this reminded me wut makes RB so ill.Both had tha vocab and u kno wut u wuz talkin bout,not jus babblin.This has to be 1 of tha best collabs i've seen in tha longest tyme.Yall needa hook up more often(unless u did cuz how would i kno).Stay ^
-Avi

Yea I feel U Linez Drawn...That was a mistake...But we said fucc it and kept it there...Peace

yo that was some good shit guys, you had alot of good vocab and it flowed mad good, keep up the ill ryhmes kids you dont need any of my advice, you two sound mad good together by the way