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I stand alone on the battlefield with the words i wield
With the time Ive lost, with Everything i can not feel//
I stand alone with no home and wings on my back, sucessfulliny mastering mass suicide attacks//
I stand alone and shadowbox the opponent that wont fall, I yell at limp body just to hear the same call//
I stand alone and spread a message of mass chaos, I stand alone with my thoughts but it will take an army to slay us//
I stand alone, judge me, rip me to pieces, Im all alone projectiong my diary in this thesis//
Believe this, one miss leaves you tripped at the line, with no time and one look, now your missing your spine//
Walking a straight line to heaven seven after eleven, Father I've sinned.. am i forgiven? Or am i stuck in this mess where people say that their livin//
And so it was written, Like the boy who fell into the well, Who died from a sore throat because nobody heard him yell//
But when his body fell and finally layed upon the ground, The kid became a hero, the pride and joy of his home town.


i wrote that in class today
maybe ill finish it
i doubt it
im back for now
peace
DONT SLEEP
READ
RESPOND

talking in the third person is a sign of weakness
dont hate cuz your blind
peace

I though this was dope shit. It did kinda form like a poem but is still had the rhyme stucture of a spit though. I'm feelin the original concept and and you stayed with the topic pretty good through the whole thing. Tight.

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Bang On The Table Productions

This was a normal piece from Muse. I enjoyed it and it did seem to have a poetic sense to it. I thought it was tight, and if I'm right I believe it was referring to someone on the front lines or having something to do with the war Iraq right now... Deep piece I enjoyed this it was tight as fuck...

pz

D9. long time no see bro. Thanks for the props. You never slept on me. Hit me up. ill be around to get some comments on my new stuff for my album. ive got my foot in teh door at virgen records. Lets hope i can show them what i got.
peace