Only bruised...I stand amused at your attempted ruse...
Exposed your views...like wolfed propaganda news...
If you had all tha clues...you'd still be...all confused...
What you stand to lose...you couldn't stand to prove...
Blind fools...tha linez you choose...a chimp could reproduce...
In half of tha time you use...
If you peruse all tha zoos...perhaps you'd find a Muse...
That wouldn't refuse to teach you...tha kinda moves...
That could beat you...no matter what wines you booze...
My Rhymes are fused...blind to hues...like skys to blues...
At altitudes...NASA wouldn't cruise, If they sent up all tha jews...
In lewd speech...like fireworks go off when opposite twos meet...
My firey stews...ooze, leak...havoc reeks like when opposing crews creep...
Abused, you seek...medical attention for your deranged perceptions...
From you, any ejection would be welcomed in contraception...
You is incomplete perfection...while I am in...complete perfection...
Flawed from inception...your brain matter's rejection...
Like landfill refuse...while my deception is shrewd...
I wouldn't steal your shoes...If they could stomp nine crews!

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well nice work. not the best i have seen from you. i know this isnt to me. as i read it. i couldnt relate to it. but the rhyme scheme was nice. i dont know about the topic. but overall it was a good piece

8-10.

oh and by the way. you think you could provide me with a couple topics for my writing. i have terrible writers block. thx man. oh and by the way. i did know all of that stuff you told me in the pm..

*im smarter than you think*

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that shit was nice...a lot of hot lines in that piece...in my opinion multi verses are the best to wrote if it makes sense and not just puttin words in there that rhyme together...it made sense to me...nice drop...one

loved it man
really felt the flow and the
hardcore rhymin that actually made
sense, I got what u were tryin to do
and I liked it even tho the topic was simple
Im lookin forward to ur next rhyme

PS peep my "7 deadly rap"
I would really like to get ur thoughts
on it, thx

Thanx, .Sand., Narcicyst, and as Always 12, People still sleep on me....oh, well, Upppinnn....Burpppp!

nice verse linez,love the chimp reproducing lines made me laugh foreal...nice multis all round...peep my shit on open mic if you get the chance....ill spit linez props...
bismillah

Thanx, Atetrack, it's nice to see another muslim in here....Salaam.

This joint was hot, the piece flowed nice. The idea wasn't really there though... but it's all good. I'm uppin' this joint.

Thanx, Enigmatic, I always appreciate your comments because you are one of the hot spitters on this sight...peace

yea this got a nice flow and u got shit loadsa vocab out there. ya rhyme scheme was nice. ya topic was done before but so what ya handled it well. anyway RETURN THE FAVOUR CUZ AND CHECK MINE BANGKOK BUSINESS

i liked this i'm new on here and that your first one i read so i know your other ones are hot nice rythem in this piece too

jugglin...thanx for replies as always