I KNOW IT DOESN'T GO HERE, BUT NO-ONE LOOKS IN THA POETRY SCRIPTURES FORUM SO I POSTED IT HERE...MUCH LOVE DEWANIA!


Expression of Love cannot be seen by the eye…
Except maybe a few actions motivated by passions…
When put into practice it can be viewed like tha sky…
But true love mastered is one who bends over backwards…
One who’d do anything to please tha other…
One who’d do any thing to see tha other…
One who Knows what it means to be a lover…
One who gives themselves freely for another…
True love is compromise…finding solace in your beautiful eyes…
When they’re happiness thrives…It’s like tha bluest skies…
After tha rain subsides…true love hides inside tha veins besides…
Tha oxygen…It can’t truely be expressed with a pen…
‘Cause by design it never ends…It’ll ride until tha world begins again…
Until tha stars spin…It’ll rise and never bend…
Until it breaks…because it’s flexible…innate
Nature is testable…destined to elevate…
Tha senses to heights delectable...to satisfy tha taste…
Of tha soul…and all attempts to hold…
It back, brings tears that are worth more than gold…
Talking to you deepens tha heart…
We, just being weekends apart…love ya hon…

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this was a nice poem,i really like shit like this,still itd sound nice on a rap,be sort of a mos def talib kweli type of rap kinda.

After tha rain subsides…true love hides inside tha veins besides…
Tha oxygen…It can’t truely be expressed with a pen…

i liked those two lines,escpcially the oxygen part,was real nice...

bismillah

Thanx, Atetrack, I always appreciate your feedback...Upppin..Burpp!

Baby that was beautiful, thank you so much.... man... I am at my desk about to cry...My heart is smiling... with tears!!! Man... I am speechless... I wish I can rap my arms around you and give you a big o' kiss... I really do appreciate that... you made my day!!! Love you!! hope hear from you tonight!! kisses!!!

Touchin'.............

Thanx for tha replies...that was for you hon...any one else's replies don't matter, but thanx anyways....

UGH! our replies dont matter eh? how stinking rude! I'm filen a protest! I think my reply matters! So here it is my reply! And you better read it!

First it was too sweet... up to something sweet. everytime a guy is that sweet it means he either did something really bad or he's about to. SO WATCH GIRL~!
Other than that it was nice... OoNnEe

AngelicSheShe, don't take offence...your replies do matter but I was trying to say that this was written exclusively for her...so if everybody replied and she didn't then tha point of this piece is meanless...sorry to be rude, but love is blind...Oh and for tha record I'm always sweet and I never do anthing bad to a woman...true men never do...

i thought that shit was deep dogg, i liked that shit, i think it would be alot betta if u put it in a rap, nice thread

soilder22

lol, that's what they all say lmao.. wait .. I've lived with my man for a year now.. we've been through alot but its those little habbits that piss a girl off lol... I'm glad your in love though.. hope there's a future to your happiness..

uppin

Expression of Love cannot be seen by the eye…
Except maybe a few actions motivated by passions…
When put into practice it can be viewed like tha sky…

I like the multies in these lines a lot
the whole drop was great
but then again almost any deep piece like that is
kats really feel deep ish
its the kinda stuff that straight up touches the soul

But true love mastered is one who bends over backwards…
One who’d do anything to please tha other…
One who’d do any thing to see tha other…
One who Knows what it means to be a lover…
One who gives themselves freely for another…

I'm giving props and respect where its needed. This was the first peice I check on here so far talent is whats opening my eyes. Much props. I plan on reading more from you. Keep a lookout for me.