(This is to any) wack individual, thats lackin the lyrical talent or physical
stamina to stand in my visual/ its a hazordous ritual/ reenactment of difficult
random syllable patterns that i have mastered at intervals/ spittin faster than
rivers flow, cuz this land isnt livable/ im trapped on this miserable planet
with bastards and imbeciles/ no one's average or typical/ their all rappers or
criminals/ with albums, a million sold, fans attached to their genitals/ and
half of the women chose, to be dancers and centerfolds/ breast cant fit into
their clothes, (cuz) they enhanced em with sillicone/ my standards and
principles, are outcasted in general/ cuz i'd die rather than listen to, tracks
by mack 10 or mystical/ now its back to original/ where each rap is subliminal/
unmatched classic material/ every man is a critic so... / with a hand full
pencils (no), with a can full of michelob/ i trample this little globe causin
considerable damage and bend the axis its tilted on/ just imagine the end
result/ as the planet collapses under the massive passages in my skull/ i was a
bad adolescent with a huge chip on his shoulder/ and as i get a bit older... i
get a little bit bolder/ now im a venomous cobra/ spittin with infinite lyrics
written in folders/ sick and demented when given a motive/ now add a pen and its
over/ you kids not livin a culture/ this business is riddin with jokers into
gimmicks, and posers.....

nice drop homie...feelin it

The wordplay on this joint is hot kid. You got it on lock so far. You need to spread out your lines, and make it easier to read... otherwise, everything's on point.

nah, dawg that was sick... forget about spacing the bars out, I followed it fine.. it does help sometimes tho. you had some nice vocab and the flow was spot.. yo, uppin' this joint..

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ai yo i gotta admit i thought u wernt much(even though u beat me)but i gotta admit dawg this piece was tighter than a virgins pussy,respect

Cheers much appreciated
Peep this

You have a good style.. try an seperate your lines though. It makes it easier to read. OoNnEe Nice piece..

yo this was a very nice drop. excellent wordplay and had some good multis. flow was good and a very nice topic. i liked this a lot. keep spittin man...


also, could you peep my shit?http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=39624