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City of Cleveland
IP: D0B1 D2B1
Down in Cleveland we be cheifin,
we be chillin we be geekin, every weekday every weekend, don't have time to get no sleep in, Refer it stays on my mind, don't fuck wit it if it's not kind, roll the best buds in my blunts, while other shit gets left behind, On the clock, I feed the need to breath the weed, On the block, fiends exceed the deeds of greed, In the city of Cleveland, I push I slang, It's a shame believin, we shook we lame, Nah sleep on us if you choose, we creepin on a come up, cuz if you creep you winnin, if you sleepin you lose. just reppin for c-town and for my niggas BTNH WUDDUP N.B.S.L wuddup n.b.s.l |
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IP: D0B1 D2B1
yo dat shit was tight but u gotta put words in yo flow to put expression! Instead of making it sound like a poem!
nice drop nigga! |
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IP: D0B1 D2B1
aight dog look you concentated on the flow and not enough on you punches and what not
1.lines to small make em longer 2.get a bigger vocabulary 3.good flow 4.aight wordplay 5.you need a constant rhymescheme abab or aabb 6.need multis 7.work on metas other than that it was aight hit me up if you dont know what any of that meanz aight holla |
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IP: BAAF 40E3
madd whackkkkkkkk
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IP: 1501 77A0
i second that (hey that rhymed) lol
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IP: D0B1 D2B1
haha it's all good i'm open to CONSTRUCTIVE critism
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IP: D0B1 D2B1
That joint waz hott. It was form the heart. Kepp it going nigga!
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IP: D0B1 D2B1
hey trill and bash get off his fucken nuts im serious
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. Doper Than You.
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IP: D0B1 D2B1
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^^ STFU U Dumb Ass.....U Don't Kick Punches In An Open Mic, U Save That For Battles....No Wonder U'r Flows Are So Butt.....Now, Let's Get Down To Business.....That Was Tight Rodney....Pretty Good Wordplay....Nice Rhyme Scheme.....I Was Feeling This.....Keep Postin' Em Fam........ NoBLe-StRiP HuSTLaS ^Whatcu Know?? Ha Ha |
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IP: 198E FFDA
i agree, i normally like a longer peice, but dis shit here was tight i liked it, and yo bash and trill dis here is wat da dudes 20th post lay off g's....
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