Tryin to work myself in here as a battle rapper, anyone think I could hack it? Heres a harder flow i just wrote, not trying to step on anyone, just lookin for an assessment of my strength, no holdin back...

check me...
I got beef like a butcher and Im widely hated,
liquor in me so im inebriated,
to your dumb ass that means intoxicated,
my light apperance had you and your crew so elated,
but now that im flowing your egos deflated,
I know your so overrated,
My nine will make your life annotated,
Ill leave you broken and desecrated,
on your rhymes i just defecated,
my fans are wise and come in al complexions,
my flows are perfection,
will stand up to a Keneth Starr inspection,
I know the sight of me gave u and your crew erections,
but Im not into man on man affection,
just allow me to give you a little direction,
stop forcing your raps through cesarian section,
birth em naturaly so you can make the connection,
if you try and step to me and your less than perfection,
Ill start an insurection,
that'll leave you with a urinary tract infection.
fuck you and your crew,
cause i can go solo
lone wolf and i don't need no pack,
all i need is my nine to make your world pitch black.

ummmmmmmmmmmm................U had no Punchlines...............This aint a good battle verse........................U gotta work on ur punchlines..............

good point...thanx much man keep it coming

yep you lack punches,,,,

worry less about all your lines ryhming and look towards wordplay and really hitting hard with each line


anyhow peep my open mic and let me know what ya think

u cant really post abattle unless ur goin towards someone battls aint about the wrdplay or the flow really..its all about the punches lol thats why i suck at it

It's already been said that there was no punchlines so I won't say it again But I have read some battles with guys who put up some really dumb stuff and end up winning it. Kind of depends on who you got voting, sometimes there is some real idiots who I wonder if even read the verses.

^^^^^^^^^Word

pledgeofpanther brings up something that I probably should have realized but didnt. Without another person it kinda is hard to set up punchlines. I suppose ill just stick to freestyles, comment on those too, help is always welcome.