not sure if ill turn this into a full song.......but i noticed all the good writers on this site have been doing backpacker style raps lately and all the newbies are tring to be street but they sound like shit......so i figured i would show them how to do it. LOL

its been 17 long years im trapped in the struggle/
huddled making plans to get cash by the bundle/
trouble is where i live its kid of tuff to make bids/
we live in poverity moms tring to raise 3 kids/
reality is people are petro, they never let go/
survive threw beef just to hear the sarrows echo/
they make chests blow, its just another cycle/
michaels life's poet, but struggles my first decsiple/
rivals turn suicidal staring up at the street lights/
it aint right and night i hear the ignorant street fights/
teens lose life for coming lite on the triple beem/
it seems fiends will take a life for a pipe dream/
im never free to breath or induldge in glamous themes/
seen my life though retrospect, and ill never squeez techs/
but i wont hesitate to knock you out if you disrespect/
i read text books and bibles but they aint helping me/
id rather sit back and read through gambino diarys/

and thats how its done newbies..............it only took me 10 mins to write this its basicaly a freestyle, so all you newbies, if your going to rap about the streets please make it better then this if you cant do that then dont rap about the streets...........

Yo man I'm feeling tha street ethics of ya flow dog. I'm really feeling tha way you flow man keep up tha work.

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A.K.A Werdz Worthless

this is hott, had sum dope lines n there
keep at it
-Tory

you def. got potential, get at that shit and youll be hot, mos definite.

lmao...you showed em flu...shits disease like your name...

lmao..i am a back packer ahha...gotta love it...

ahhh finally...a warning post....someone make this one of those htings like"if you aint as good as this get out"seeing how it was done in such a sort time,im glad it was better then everyone elses street shit...ahha....

the triple beam line was good,and the one after about hte pipe dream...i aint heard the word gambino in a time dun haha....still makes me laugh for some reason,but eh...like it all round was good flow,should build on it forsure...itll come out nicely

i have a new peice!!!

bwhaha

called step left....landmines..

^^so yeah,check it out sometime...

thanks for the replys.

upping so the newbies could see how to do it.

i was feelin this shit god,i say dont flow about streets if you havent been on tha streets i dont know some people are fake[its thos thugs that're fake i hate]thats what i say ,keep postin these ill ass pieces.

....a yo flu......i said some shit bout u bein a baby.......but forget dat shit......dat drop was excellent.........i felt dat shit.....dawg u drop mad shit...fo' sho..........no beef between us......aight....peace out homie............

This was raw..

Feelin this dunz..

i like i said before don't mistake me for a newbie and shit i was joined this shit before they started rebuildin this shit i truthfully this was hot but where's the truth in it, if you're strugglelin so much sell your computer or somethiun i'm not sayin that you're not good cause this was hot and that's about all i got to say

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shut the fuck up

even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun

dead in middle of little of little italy
little did we know that we riddle
some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun

^^^ like i said, i did this to show newbies how to do it,

honestly im not broke anymore, i got me a job and both my partents work at a casino so they got cash now,

but i did grow up with nothing, thats why i could rap about it i know what all that shits about, and i still see it all around me, i dont just write about my self, i write about shit around me too.

again i did this to show the newbies what its about, their is to many newbies doing shit like, "im a thug from the street/ i never eat/ its hot as heat/ i have dirty feet/"

thanks for the replys everyone.

haha dat last shit u said reminds me of like half da ppl on here, thats pretty sad lol but ur verse was coo i'll be lookin out for more of ur shit, peace.

this aint hot its aight, 10 minutes to spit 17 bars is not a freestyle, some ok vocab used on, theme a bit played. its fake as weel coz how can u be raised in pverty when u r connected up 2 da internet and yo first line bites wus CREAM badly widout a reference

did i bite wu tang? are you sure about that?

in cream it says

22 long hard years im still struggling,

i said

its be 17 long years and im trapped in a struggle.

yes they are simalar but i didnt bite wu.



like i already said, yes i was raised poor, i grew up with 6 people in a small house, it was 1 bedroom, living room, and bathroom, and it was connected to the back of a store.

and no im not broke anymore cause both my parents work at a casino and i have a job too(thats how i pay for the internet),

but but like i said i was raised poor. so i know all about that shit,(we just moved[2 blocks away] 3 years ago) just because i have a computer doesnt mean i was raised in the suburbs. and it doesnt mean im in the suburbs now.

and if you would have took your time to read you would have seen that i already explained that.



rapping about your life is never played,