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what happened to our triangle
why has it become such a huge tangle i guess you can call me the point the point of our triangle the heartless one out of us all i haven't let anyone get to me but you have you them get to it all it use to be the three of us not anymore people would try to break our triangle but we were the strongest of them all they said triangles are the strongest things that they won't ever break i guess they were WRONG this one did |
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This is my first post so have mercy
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it was headed in tha right direction,work on more vocab,and poetry doesnt always have to rhyme so im not gonna say anything about it not rhyming,sometimes it gives your piece more finess,but your goin in tha right direction,keep postin and elevatin,take our criticism if its positive and utilize it to better your skills,even if it isnt positive criticism.peace out boo.
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Thanks for your advice!!
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