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Quick Sand

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ight i'm in, hopefully i won't get screwed ova again............................................. .................................................. .................................................. .

*talking*
(guy off the streets)... yo there...wanna hear a life story?
(me)... bout what?
(guy off the streets)... of how... how my life is so... horrible n livin in... in nothin
(me)... what the fuck...nah, you thought yo life was all bad cuz you poor ya fuck you... shit.........done brought back memories

yo this reflects on how the life of me was like quicksand... you'll get it

when i was born.......
my motha was the only one waitin fo me to come out n see me shead my 1st tears,
while my dad was back at home sittin on the couch downin a couple of beers,

a couple of hours went past n it seemed that my respiration started to malfuntion,
mom calls home to tell my dad but he wasn't in no hurry to get to the hospital cuz only thing he was worried about is his money n didn't have any plans on givin me nothin,

well shit my fatha... didn't he know it that all the struggles that i fought n survived,
no he didn't... he kicked the shit outta my mom n left her cuz her child has arrived

it wasn't like he couldn't afford us cuz he worked down on wallstreet,
ma' lived thru poverty til i reached the age of 3... then we got a call n i was so excited to hear "it's daddy",

he told me he was givin us a million dollars that he hit on the lotto,
how excited i was to see that he was comin ova tomarrow,

next day

ma decided that she was gonna make a fancy dinner off the money she made from sellin drugs,
the aroma in the air was full of love fo pops to come home n all i wanted from him was some kisses n hugs,

around 6 p.m. i hear the knock on the door,
i flew it open n tackled my dad til he almost hit the floor,

i knew something was wrong wit the expression on his face,
wouldn't ya know it... he got layed off n just wanted somewhere to stay

my dumbass mom who i could always trust took him in,
i dealt wit the neglect of my parents n the emotional needs within

*age of 8*

we lived off welfair til my dad got a half ass job while i was makin the most money shovelin sidewalks,
the anger built inside of me that i just wanted to make his brain explode n i told him he "blow pops"

*age 12*
i leveled with it n just started to hang wit the gangs,
didn't give a fuck about my family cuz i all i needed was the money i used to buy heroin n cocaine

life then was pretty easy, only needed to deal wit my parents fo shelter n feeding,
they noticed i didn't care about them... so they kicked me out the house where it was 10 degreez below freezing

*age17*
i lived on the streets just like you old man wit nothin but a gang n a revolver,
i stole money off old ladies so my drugs would be covered

i found a job at the family day care center where the kids loved me,
i'd tell them jokes about my dad n they considered it funny

*age 23*

i got my own apartment n i finally found a woman that was at my side,
i knew we were meant to get married n have children the way she told me how she loved me at night

*got married at age 25, now at age 27*

we both decided that havin a baby was all good cuz we had the money to support now,
my wife expected to deliver in three months about,

i came home 1 night to see her ridin her pregnant ass on some dude's dick,
i flipped by throwin bricks from that have fallin from the walls at the prick

he ran out hurridly n my wife just stood there n tried to tell me she was sorry,
then she went out n said that the baby wasn't mine but my bestfriend's bobby

i walked out but to only come back n unload endless clips into my 'used to be wife'
fo all the shit i've been thru i killed her without an eye to wipe

next goes fo my farther n mother who probably don't even think i exist,
i walked in casually n smiled then let my revolver hiss......

*looks down at the ground*
(me)the quick sand 1nce at my neck is now in between my toes... lettin this out really helped old man... now here's ya 5 cents
(guy on the street)thank you... come back again when ya have more problems...

explanation- i had somethin goin wit my dad givin us 1 million dollars...then he really didn't hit the lotto n just wanted a place to stay... it was all fallin in quick sand afta that

yo this cat is late... but still leave me feed back please... i wanna know how ya thought i did on this

Man you know how to rap bout this stuff... it was really good... honestly... I mean I personaly dont read RAPS that ARE THAT LONG...KEEP UP DA GOOD WORK

yo evil i posted my verse at frontlines a while a go peace out
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wow this was good,keep it up i'm touched,i'm not gonna judge this cause i've never done a topical battle,keep it up fam ~1~*********************************************** ************************************************** ****

that shit was ill man Loved evry bit of it, keep em comin and stay up top. nice shit. holla back
1ne
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yo sorry bout the mix up, i thought it was due by this next coming tuesday, give me until tonight to post.

damn, that kid aint post, but nyce verse anyways.....it had feelin, rhyme scheme could have been betta, but otha than that it was a phat piece, stay real, and check tha p.m. i sent you, peace, 1 luv

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"I'm stuck with...what i'm Stuck Wit, cause i don't Suck Dick" - Jadakiss

ight... personally i think this is bullshit if they can post late 2 weeks ago against me but no otha time it was allowed...i'll c&p the rules for you
i think that he can still post his verse but not be able to get the win cuz he is late which i coulda done better if i had this damn long