True freestyle that I sung/rappedto my ex-girlfriend on he bus to Cedar Point.......

I looked in her eyes the whole time.......

I loved her I swear I did,
From her toes to her hair I did,
Singin this shit just makes me tear-eyed kid,
Fall in love with her I fear I did,
She was som'n beautiful,
To the point that shit was unusual,
Hank Aaron throwback lookin cute in 44,
Never fought over gourmet just dispute in corner stores,
2 for a dollar now she gotta leave me alone,
I hoped it was her everytime I heard the ring of the phone,
I hit the peak everytime I heard her scream when she moaned,
I took her for granted now I cant believe that she gon'.............

I loved that girl.........

i wont sleep on ya playboy, if that was a tru freestyle.....mad props, lyked tha rhyme scheme, multi's were hott, keep postin, stay real, peace, 1 luv

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Thanks for the reply.......keep'em coming......

Singin this shit just makes me tear-eyed kid,
Fall in love with her I fear I did,
She was som'n beautiful,
To the point that shit was unusual,


Short...sweet..to the point...liked it...good flow keep droppin

damn,..........................that shit was tight...................sorry for wut happend........keep spittin dawg.

shits tough....keep ya head up....good job

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=56997

word keep ya head up erbody gotta deal wit that one day.and if that was straight up free to her that ill.1

Thanks again......holla at me

Damn kid, thats deep right there...keep it up man..HoLLa

Short, to the point good job.

Good lookin out..........

It was good, I enjoyed i t..........I kinda have a similar one called "confused".....
Check it if you can....
This was good, Short....Not to much word play, but you were just tryin to state a point, and we all do that and you dont have to get all fancy when ur tryin to express your ture feelins for the one you love....Feelin it the whole way...

NOthin but love
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