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Old 06-20-03, 03:20 AM   #1
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A Field of Red

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OMG another poem about war and patriotism? what can i say, i love my country and our veterans...

A field of Red,
The blood runs cold,
I may be lame and I may be old,
But at one time I was young and bold,
I remember this field long ago,
Where bullets sprayed,
Causing the rise of a large death toll,
On this field of Red,
Where the blood runs cold.
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Old 06-24-03, 02:38 PM   #2
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uppin 4 some response
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Old 06-25-03, 04:01 PM   #3
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uppin 4 some fuckin response.
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Old 06-25-03, 04:28 PM   #4
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hmm..yea you must luv ya country..lol..jp...nice piece..very short..but had nice imagery in it...God bless..1..
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Old 06-25-03, 06:11 PM   #5
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Patriotism is always good

the heartfelt simplistic concept of this piece is very strong

and yeah i liked ur previous tho...seemed better to me than this one..

the short freestyled shit is aight...just one thing...be more descriptive ..it would help a lot

keep doin ur thang...


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Old 06-30-03, 01:02 AM   #6
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What up pax......... How you been playa?
I just got out awhile ago man, how shit
been 4 ya, i liked ya stuff playa, holla
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Old 07-03-03, 10:39 AM   #7
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Simple, strong and compressed well to fit into so few lines/words..

...showing part of war's horror...but sprinkling on top a bit of the 'good' side...you know 'brave warrior' and all that shite...(sorry, just referring to the use of brave warrior so loosely and fake for propoganda in the past, present and future..)..

...resp...
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Old 07-04-03, 01:04 AM   #8
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Old 07-04-03, 03:59 AM   #9
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I can't think of anything else to say that hasn't been, so, nice short peice, perfect length for it, sometimes poems go way to long and in circles, but you did a nice concise writing, nice work
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