ill snipe u like that dc cat/leavin yea with lines flat/i got 81 lives like nine cats/got my nines straped/ready for war,ready to even the score/leavin u with ya brains exploded all over the floor/fucked ur girl, now ur mad shes a whore/with flow so sharp its like cheddar/ill swiss cheese ya sweater/ya thinkin "damn, aint no one better"/ur shirts all bloody n after 20 blunts my eyes still aint redder/ill mangal ya body, make it look like it was put threw a shredder/now listen up or leave/ill leave u in a wheel chair like that cat christopher reeves/looks can decieve/ill give u the worst beating u ever recieved/just "ask jeeves"/ im white but i can still rhyme tight...1

I'm white too...good multies but content is too simple and choice of vocabulary is virtually nil...but it's alright for a first drop...keep rhyming and elevate more...cause you wanna catch eminem, don't you? lol anyways, more complexities and better subject matter and you have the potential to be a great emcee...return the favor, peep my new joint--Ya'll hate it...peace

for a newb... your tite... you still need to elevate your vocab and content like ^^ that guy said.... I'm white too... I think almost 80% of the people here are too... all I gotta say is don't get cocky, it doesn't go too well if you get an attitude.. 1.. keep spittin'

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