I read yo raps and I think that ur a slob,
U need to get yo bitch ass up and get a job.
I bet ur a homo, don't even have a lady,
Bitch u can't rap, u fake ass Slim Shady.
Give up rap, go listen to some rock,
I'm beg'n u dawg, pleeeese stop.
U can't rap, U ain't got no skills,
Try to battle me u gon get killed.
I don't want to see u used the word nigga no mo,
U ain't got rights u bitch ass hoe.
I hope u take heed and give rap up,
All I really wanted to say is U SUCK!

u seriously need ta elevate dawg

~1~

^^what he said... that was wack, it flowed but the vocab, topic, length and everything else was amature... 1

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that sucked............................your terrible.......................................... ........word!

Guys like you , make guys like me .... Feel a whole lot better about their shit ..... Thanks

lmao^
well, you should try topicals.
write about something that means something to you, rather than this bullshit that any cat could think up in two seconds.
Write a story, just make it flow and rhyme.
Just try different stuff, and add some vocab and you might be able to write a decent rhyme.
Peace

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