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Old 07-11-03, 12:50 AM   #1
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Dirty Walls

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Once was considered the best basketball player in the nation...but not anymore

Straight A's on a full scholarship to North Carolina...but that was before

Before his Father walked outta his life...Mother found soaked in blood on the floor

Older brother was nothing but a alcholic that had no problem living poor

He loves the rain...When it comes it can sometimes wash away his pain

Needs an exit from it all but his life is on a one way lane

Friends turn their backs...hope they can get a discount on a ticket to fame

I need some money...Remeber me...Im you third cousin....Its all the same

Plus with all this trouble hes becoming a dad

Heres a story of a kids last day....Who lost everything he had

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Sitting quietly in his room rather a cell....holding a peice close

Hasnt faced all struggle but the kid has lived most

Newport in his mouth..tastes better knowing this is his last

Inhale...Exhale..Use to doing the scoring so he figures he'll let
time pass
No fear in his face...Suprises most with his nonchalent manner

Once a fan...above his tv hangs a torn Jordan banner

Wish he could see his problem better maybe he needed galsses

Feels that writing will only take time...so his Will contains nothing but ciggarete ashes
Leaves no notes no message behind

Use to wish life was a movie so he could rewind

No music...No sounds actually....Hell not even a vibe

He laughs away thoughts through his head reapetdley as his Newport nears the end

Past couple months he has become his only friend

Flicks the rest into his trash and watchs the smoke from it rise out

Too focused now....Nothing can cry out
Lays back in his broken chair and stares at his dirty walls

Must have been thinking about his peice of shit car the way his mind stalls
For a moment at ease....the birds and the trees

............Fuck It
Figure he will enjoy his last few mintues...Watch his favorite show

"Damn I actually read the credits this time...Definetly time to go"
(Laughs his pain away)

.............Next on VH1 "Where Are They Now"...............
.............BANG...........................
.............Now his girl has a reason to clean the dirty walls.............
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Old 07-11-03, 01:32 PM   #2
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great freakin ending...lol....definately enjoyed reading it...the storyline was real good, imagery was great...
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Old 07-11-03, 04:28 PM   #3
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it was nice...tight ending...i think it got better after the division...the focus on the newport brought a whole new aspect to it......which added alot and was really nice....good imagery...
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Old 07-12-03, 04:30 PM   #4
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thanks miss tique and recca....uppin

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Old 07-12-03, 11:33 PM   #5
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Awesome poem, yah and kick ass ending!
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Old 07-13-03, 06:50 AM   #6
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Daaaaaaaaaamn! I am eternally, extremelly, undeniably, and unbelievably impressed. You have a story telling ability. Obviously the endings was good, but it was sweet how you mentioned the dirty walls before the end. The second part was tight. I can't believe you were able to have such a good rhyme scheme. I'll say it again... Damn.
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Old 07-13-03, 05:51 PM   #7
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Thanks Upping
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Old 07-13-03, 11:07 PM   #8
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That shit was dopetry i really like how u had the 2nd part revolve around the cigarette keep that shit comin cause as u can tell niggas is feelin ya words mayne, 1luv.
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Old 07-14-03, 04:02 PM   #9
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Definetly respect to all those who respond and take time to read some of my peices.....Thanks Nfamous Phoenix and all others....

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