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The Meanin of life...
IP: 25C2 23BD
Im new tu writing n shit.. so im prob not all dat great but oh well.. I thought Id post somethin i wrote the other day anywaz... tell me what yll think..
::The Meaning Of Life:: Im dripping in fumes of my own creation Im drifting into a world I cant see. My bodies a mantel its ashes spread scandel The pieces stained with anomosity. I feel like an angel cursing the heavens. I steal my innocence and give it to theives. Ive escaped from a dungeon to peel off my sunburn But the words people say still imprison me. Down a dead end i walk to find night When I reach the begining i search for a light. A window of poison circles my skin A world of beauty lays ahead of me. I break away evil with shadows of you But when the glass shatters the sun reviels truth. Im littered with splinters a cast sorrounds my eyes My blood sprinkles vinegar i taste the meaning of life. |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
really enjoyed reading this...but i couldnt tell whether there was an intended rhyme scheme or not...nevertheless it was a good piece...great use of imagery...definately a strong way to come out with your first post...lol....look forward to reading more from you...keep dropping...
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IP: 25C2 23BD
Naw, I wasnt really focusin anythin on the scheme, I just wanted to spread it out visually, it's da best way to write in my opinion.
Ty for your opinion man. |
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