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Old 07-30-03, 04:53 PM   #1
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"Am I Too Gangsta"

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I Hit Y’all, With Swifty Ninja Stars...
Walking About, With Multiple Knife Scars...
Cuban Cigars n’ Ridin’ In Stolen Cars...(Screech)
I’ve Served Ours, Now I’m Back...
Behind Bars, With All Rap’s Superstars...
Split Personalities Like An Earthquake...
I Need Several E’s, Just To Keep Me Awake... (I’m Up)
I Got The Shakes, Think I’d Learn From My Mistakes...
Lets Up The Stakes, Think You Got - What It Takes...
Assassination Attempts - Too Many Escapes...
Passionate Nights - I use Videotapes...
Am I Too Gansgta, I Use A.k’s Just To Thank Ya.... (ha,ha,)

Am I Too Gangsta - Let’s Play The Game.....
Am I Too Gangsta - Putting Your Name, To Shame....
Am I Too Gangsta - I Got Nines, With Perfect Aim...
Am I Too Gangsta - Or Like 50, Just A Wanksta...

I Walk About With Armed Security... (Bang)
Famous Obscurity n’ Lyrical Purity...
Gangsta Actions - Since I Finished Maturity...
I’m Most Feared, That’s Established Surety...
Countless Murders, I’ve Been Cleared.... (Wasn’t Me)
Ever Wonder, Why Your Momma Disappeared...
To Y’all I’m Revered, I Died - Reappeared....
I’m Like Christ, My Heads Overratedly Priced...
Your Dead Body, I Spat On, Then Sliced...
I Walk About The “Hood”, Suicide - I Should...(Pills, Yea)
Fuck You Up, I Would, Motherfucker Misunderstood....
That I’m Stood, As Strong As A Metal Wood....
Am I Too Gansgta, I Use A.k’s Just To Thank Ya....(Fuck You)


Am I Too Gangsta - Let’s Play The Game.....
Am I Too Gangsta - Putttin Your Name, To Shame....
Am I Too Gangsta - I Got Nines, With Perfect Aim...
Am I Too Gangsta - Or Like 50, Just A Wanksta...


Fuck, Look At What I’ve Become, I Think I’m Gansgta 2nd To None...
I used To Spit MY Shit For Fun, Watch Out, The Urban War Has Begun...
I Don’t Fight With Guns, I Fight With Lyrics, That Scorch Like The Sun....
With Words, I’m Never Outdone, I’m Not Tough, Really I’m Just A Mothers Son...
Gangsta Rap Just isn’t Me, I Got Devotees All the Way, From London To Tennessee…
No Bitch, In The Game - Got More Fame Than Me, I leave You - A Renowned Mc...
I Tried To be Everything I Can Be, Now I Realise, I’ll Never Make It Onto A Cd....
Feel Like I Went With Tyson - For 10 Bouts, Fuck This Shit ........ I’m Out (AaAAhHhH)

Am I Too Gangsta - Let’s Play The Game.....
Am I Too Gangsta - Purting Your Name, To Shame....
Am I Too Gangsta - I Got Nines, With Perfect Aim...
Am I Too Gangsta - Or Like 50, Just A Wanksta...

Rhytmic:Ha..ha,, Had You Fooled There..No Gangsta For Me.....I've Hit Writers Block Y'all, ha..ha...
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Old 07-30-03, 05:02 PM   #2
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i liked this actually, the ad-libs were funny, some of the lines were hilarious and this came off kind of tounge in cheek. the hook was poor though, i dunno why it is how peple can write good verses and wack hooks, i've done it myself.

worth the read man.
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Old 07-31-03, 06:49 AM   #3
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uppin',

Yea I'm Goin Through A Bad Spell Of Writers Block, That Hook Was Weak..I Can Barely Put 3 lines Together nOw...lol
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Old 07-31-03, 06:57 AM   #4
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Not bad dawg It was aight pretty funy too
keep elivatin


Yo man can you peep this and vlote honestly I aint a shit newb either, just to this site so u'll enjoy this battle

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=69865
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Old 07-31-03, 08:22 AM   #5
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very funny the title through me off cuz i've read some of your other stuff so i saw this and was like wtf but i get dope
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Old 07-31-03, 11:06 AM   #6
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^^was nice~definitly betta in audio tho...
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Old 07-31-03, 11:13 AM   #7
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yeah....this would sound good in audio, i could just imagine the beat and everything.........
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Old 07-31-03, 04:12 PM   #8
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Constructive Critisim, PLz...

Thanx For The Replies So Far.
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Old 08-01-03, 07:02 AM   #9
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Uppin'
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Old 08-01-03, 07:10 AM   #10
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Ehhhh, it would sound better in audio, im not really feeling the whole "Im a gangster" thing over the internet, but this was decent, flowed pretty good as i read it, addlibs were funny, hook was blah - am i like 50, a wanksta <-- that was wack bro!

Rest of it was decent, made for an ok read, just need to get off the ganksta tip and you'll be a decent writer.
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Old 08-01-03, 07:14 AM   #11
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^This is My First Gangsta Piece, I Hate Gangsta Rap, BUt I Thought I'd Do Something Differant..lol, Anyway, I'm Taking A Break - Going Through Mad Writers Block, Think it SHowed Here..lol^
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Old 08-01-03, 07:29 AM   #12
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Lmao..good shit man..funny as hell
Nice Drop Though...

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Old 08-01-03, 10:13 AM   #13
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Shit was decent... chorus was kinda weak... but that's already been stated. Definitely the most simple verses I've seen you write thus far... other than
'Assassination Attempts - Too Many Escapes...
Passionate Nights - I use Videotapes...'
None of the lines stuck out at me... I've read better from you... keep writin' though... you'll break the writer's block eventually... Peace...
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Old 08-01-03, 10:18 PM   #14
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That I’m Stood, As Strong As A Metal Wood....

^wtf? lol... Funny

Multis Were Plenty... Flow Was Decent... Structure Is Dope .. Content Was Average

Nice Drop I Would Say... I Wasn't Feelin' That 50 Line Either...

7/10
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